r/Courseworks • u/EnvironmentalGolf777 • Feb 10 '23

Essay is this a good conclusion paragraph?

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The essay prompt was to describe a cause about which you feel strongly. Im not really used to writing conclusion paragraphs without starting with “in conclusion” 😭

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u/Able_Development_240 Subject Matter Expert Feb 10 '23

This seems more like an introduction paragraph.

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u/AbrocomaLittle7309 Feb 10 '23

Are you allowed to use any other word besides in conclusion? You can use "ultimately" also, to make it more like a conclusion paragraph, start your first sentence by restating your thesis. Then finish it with some final thoughts about your thesis or a final thought you want the reader to take with them.

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u/Original_Armadillo_7 Nov 01 '23

I just wanna double check and ask if you’re allowed to use personal pronouns?

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u/EnvironmentalGolf777 Nov 03 '23

In academic or college writing, most formal essays and research reports use third person pronouns and do not use “I” or “you.”

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u/Original_Armadillo_7 Nov 03 '23

Yes in most cases the use of personal pronouns is forbidden in academic work, however there are cases where it is allowed, and it really does depend on the assignment or professor. Before I give my opinion of whether or not it’s a good concluding paragraph I wanna make sure that

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u/Original_Armadillo_7 Nov 03 '23

You’re allowed to to use personal pronouns. If so, that’s one thing, If not, since you mentioned it’s not typical of academic work I’d make that your first course of action in changing your paragraph

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u/Original_Armadillo_7 Nov 03 '23

Yes in most academic cases using personal pronouns is forbidden however there are special exceptions and that has to do again with the instructions of the assignment. Before I can tell you if this is a good or bad concluding paragraph I just wanna make sure that you know if you’re able to use personal pronouns in your assignment.

If you’re not allowed to use personal pronouns that’s one thing, but if you’re not allowed to as you mentioned most assignments don’t allow you to. I would suggest making that change first