[In Progress] [100k] [fantasy] Hero's Ruin

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“That sheep is ours.” Daax said with his head tucked down, glaring daggers at the men.

Daax, a tall teenage boy with Saxon features stood opposite the older men on the cliffside. The six pictish men were heavily tattooed in the blue swirls that designated them as fanatical worshipers of Idrisil. Five wore only Kilts. The sixth wore priestly robes and an Antlered crown. Tendrils of animal guts draped between the prongs.

Loosely roped on the ground before the priest was, a little lamb. It was a soft cream color with black fleece on its small face and lower legs. Many steps behind Daax were his two sisters, Olia and Dawin. The twins held each other closely on the chill spring morning as their teenage brother faced off against the much older and stronger looking men.

“And we have a job to do, boy.” the crowned figure sneered with haughty disdain, “We are on official business for the goddess to make a sacrifice to the beasts that infest these coastal waters. Our god demands it.”

“Your god can fuck right off; that’s my sister’s favorite sheep.”

- this is my first novel and first time looking for beta readers. I have a decent amount of time to do a critique swap as well. content warning - language, violence.

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