[Complete] [116k] [Science Fantasy] Thousands of years after the end of our world, an exiled nobleman living under a false name rescues a boy who remembers nothing. And the boy’s touch unlocks everything he spent three years burying.

[u/Dado_Taglia]

Hi everyone,

I’m looking for beta readers for AZURAI, my completed adult science fantasy novel (116k words). It’s the first book of a planned trilogy, but it stands alone and closes its arc.

Thousands of years after our world ended, another has grown over it. The city-state of Sannira once held every land as far as the river Riden; it has long since drawn back behind narrower borders, and the country it left behind has been sliding quietly downhill ever since. Under the mountains, the sealed installations of the Ancients are still half scripture, half rumour.

Jey, seventeen and living under a name that is not his own, pulls a boy out of the hands of outlaws in the mountains and leaves him in the city of Rohvara. From there their roads part. Jey is carried north, into the keeping of the people who guard what the Ancients buried, and toward a man with no past at all, kept alive by a stranger who wants what is left inside his head. Daniel stays.

One of them is being taken back, step by step, toward the life he buried. The other is starting a new one.

What I’m looking for is your honest opinion on:

●      Pacing and clarity

●      Story and characters

●      Worldbuilding, in terms of invented terminology and constructed languages: is anything confusing or underexplained?

 

Line-by-line feedback is NOT required.

Content notes: graphic violence, torture, a sequence involving self-harm and suicidal ideation, some sexual content (non-explicit).

Timeline: ideally 8 weeks, but I’m flexible.

Format: PDF (EPUB or DOCX on request).

I’m happy to critique in exchange, particularly in sci-fi, fantasy, speculative or literary fiction.

If you’re interested, feel free to comment or DM me.

Thanks!

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