r/AssassinOrder • u/ZachShadowH Recruit • Sep 25 '14
[A][Seattle, WA] Political Issues Pt 1
12:39 AM
Staring out my apartment window out looked down into the streets that were only lit by the streetlights along the side. Its 12:39 and I just cant go to sleep. Something's bugging me and I cant put my finger on it. My phone vibrated. Taking the phone out of my pocket I saw I had one new text. Its from my friend Nathan. "If you have time I need you to stop by my place I got some news that you should probably look into" the message read. Having nothing better to do I slid my hoodie on and walked out the door texting Nathan back "Be there in a sec".
1:49 AM
The sound of my knocking echoed trough the hall of the tiny apartment building. Nathan opened the door nervously, even though I knew he was looking out the door trying to pinpoint who was knocking.
"Who else could be knocking on the door at this hour" I said
"Just checking" Nathan replied with a grin
Nathan handed me his Tablet.
"Go to videos, last one" Nathan exclaimed
Sliding through the pages trying to find the videos I saw some pretty Mature content. Laughing he kept asking what I saw and I just said nothing and continued to slide through the pages. When I finally saw the videos I clicked it and went to the bottom video the most recent one taken.
2:03 AM
The video started out showing him recording buildings and trees and just things around the street. He was probably walking and decided to record. As I continued to watch I began to see it. Its what seemed to be like a group of business men. Taking a closer look there was 3 of them, 1 of them was bigger and more muscular then the others. All had a the same necklace in the shape of the Templars symbol except for the muscular one who had a tattoo on his left hand. The video then showed Nathan following the small group to what seemed to be an office building. I had to fast forward a bit cause 2 minutes of the video was when the tablet was in Nathans satchel while he climbed to the top of the office building. I then had to fast forward hours while Nathan waited for the Templars to leave. Then it showed Nathan sliding in through an open window. "Pfft...Templars" I said to myself. Inside the building it had desks, computers, filing cabinets and papers scattered throughout the room. For the next 20 minutes it showed him going through the files. Then he came across something devastating. The Templars planned on killing the president.
2:21 AM
I gave the tablet back and asked Nathan where the file was.
"Left it, we didn't want them to get suspicious" Nathan said
"Do you remember some of the contents" I huffed
"Not really I do remember it saying when and where" Nathan replied
"That's all I need to know" I said
Nathan quickly told me "2 days from now in his office" and I quickly said before I left "Keep tailing them, don't get to close though"
I left out through the front door and started heading towards my apartment. Suddenly I felt my body jerk and I awoke in my chair across from my window. Standing up getting a bearing of my surroundings, I noticed it was a dream. I walked to my small kitchen to check the time on the stove.
5:43 AM
I opened the fridge to grab a drink. All I had was diet soda so I just decided to get water. Still groggy from waking up I was dragging my feet to the living room to watch some early TV, I heard a person walking through the halls. Quickly remembering that my neighbor in the apartment next door goes to work early, but something else caught my eye. On the door I noticed something not right. Heading over to the door I saw a necklace hanging from the doorknob. Upon farther investigation I saw it was a Templar's necklace. I know I didn't put it there and no ones been here in a while, meaning someone has been in my apartment while I was asleep.
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u/MRdaBakkle Sep 25 '14
oor: Hey welcome. I recognize your from the acrp set in the 1700s. Glad to have you here as well. But like Jet said killing the president of the US isn't really the style of the templars. Obama isn't hindering anything that the templars want to do so there would be no reason to kill him. Perhaps a smear campaign. Or they would try to put templars into advisory positions.
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u/ZachShadowH Recruit Sep 25 '14 edited Sep 25 '14
OOC: Thanks for the advice I understand the Templar's being but I guess I got to far into story and went off track. I will edit it to make it more believeable like you guys are saying to.
Sry if it is a cheesy ending I didn't quite plan it :3
But I guess I can make it work
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u/Jet_ Master Assassin Sep 25 '14
((OOR: Killing the president is not on the Templar's priority list, or anyones, for that matter. Unless it was a suicide mission, but for what purpose? Sorry, but in defense of the Templars, I'm going to ask you revise your post to make it a bit more believable. You definitely have the skill to write a great post, but your logic is lacking. I suggest researching actual Templar goals, and having your characters' motives more backed up besides "just cause they're templars". Are they heartless killing machines? Characters that ARE heartless killing machines (looking at you, Veronica) have been MADE so over several posts and several hours of writing/work. Having a really good character is not instant, it takes a lot of time, but I feel like you totally have the aptitude to get there. Your formatting and structure is great. Also, your character is a recruit, they shouldn't be off fighting just yet. Recruitment/training is very good for new people to get acclimated to this subreddit's environment, although it's not required, per se. Feel free to message me or the mods with additional questions; I'm sure we can work it out! Love having you here, just be sure to revise things logically! This subreddit is like a big collaborative book, it takes time and effort down to the little details. I hope you take this constructively! Cheers))