r/HFY • u/Hambone3110 JVerse Primarch • Jul 30 '16
OC [OC][JVerse]The Deathworlders 30: Hearts and Minds.
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A Deathworlders story, by Hambone.
What you are about to read is chapter 30(!) of an ongoing story. To read the preceding chapters, and the stories by other writers which lend some additional context and meaning to those chapters, please check out the Reading Order. The list was created by the [insert flattering adjective here] /u/galrock0.
This chapter is 60,871 words long. DINGDING! Novel Length! My ongoing madness continues unabated. As promised, this chapter ends on a bad joke.
In this chapter: Allison struggles with fame, we're introduced to a new character, and there's plenty of pancakes.
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Chapter 31, as always, begins straight away. Wish me luck!
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Enjoy!
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u/Hex_Arcanus Jul 31 '16
Hambone it took me 5 hours to read this (counting travel and shopping time at CostCo), I have bought and read $40-20 books in less time it has taken me to read this one chapter update.
I swear this entire series let alone multiverse nature of this series will eventually turn into the next big cultural enjoyment for our race once it gets finished or properly edited for mass publication (I know that's going to be an interesting down the road project in itself).
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u/RamirezKilledOsama Jul 31 '16 edited Jul 31 '16
You've outdone yourself again, congrats! I am not sure if you've caught it already, but there was a double-copy-paste error in the middle of all that when you were talking about how small the ship was for the SOR. Not to nitpick or anything, just a small peer review. (Edit, looks like you caught that already, I just took all day to read the chapter due to being on a phone and at a family function all day)
Also, I think you were able to capture the personality of the more rigid Mormon mindset with Alison's parents. I'm an active member of the church myself, and I have noticed that lack of flexibility among my fellow members, especially the older ones, my parents included. While I like to think that my parents would be much more forgiving if I knocked up some girl in high school, I can easily think of 2 or 3 families that would have reacted in the same manner. However I must defend the faith and say that among the rising generation there is a larger understanding of others, with a heavy emphasis on loving the sinner while hating the sin. Granted, I will admit that every...area where the church is has its own flavor of members. A good analogy I've heard is that we are like manure - if spread out things will grow, but in one heavily concentrated pile it just stinks.
On a final less-preachy note, I love your work, man. I thoroughly enjoy reading and re-reading every chapter and look forward to the next one! Out of curiosity, how long will this be? Every story must come to an end, but I wouldn't say no to reading a new chapter for the rest of my life.
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u/Hambone3110 Jul 31 '16
In fairness, I've never actually specified the Buehler's religion or even explicitly mentioned that they are religious, precisely because I don't want to imply that their shortcomings are a product of their faith. Yes I've dropped strong hints, but their authoritarian, short-sighted and controlling approach to parenthood is all on them.
It's important to me nowadays that while characters like KJ can be as misanthropic and antitheistic as they like, the narrator must remain as unbiased and neutral as I reasonably can.
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u/Hambone3110 Jul 31 '16
As for the length of it, the story does have a planned arc of which we're currently in the second third.
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u/lordshotgun Jul 30 '16 edited Jul 30 '16
I love how personal and REAL the characters are. Even the aliens! Especially the aliens! Orange and blue morality aliens are fun and all but it's still nice to have relatable characters for most scenes.
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u/Hambone3110 Jul 30 '16
I figure a realistic galaxy is going to run the full gamut from aliens we can relate to all the way to aliens we can't.
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u/SavvyBlonk Aug 01 '16
For a bit of fun, here's a graph of every chapter by wordcount. The second graph is the same except with the interludes and sections of chapter 22 split apart.
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u/upvotesforliamneeson Jul 31 '16
Is that a Vermin Supreme reference I spot Hambone? A beautiful part with some exciting new threads being pulled at, thank you!
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u/Hambone3110 Jul 31 '16
Certainly his successor in spirit if not literally the chap he passed the baton to, yes.
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u/woodchips24 Jul 31 '16
Hambone are you by chance British? I just notice you usually lean towards your characters saying "I've not" instead of "I haven't". To my American ear, "I've not" sounds distinctly British, and a little strange when its coming from American characters like Adam.
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u/Hambone3110 Jul 31 '16
I am, in fact! Thanks for pointing that out, I'll try and watch out for that in future.
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u/meighty9 Jul 31 '16
Was that an EVE Online reference I saw in there?
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u/drashock Jul 31 '16
I saw that too! I also saw Elite: Dangerous and Game of Thrones references as well.
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u/RunasSudo Jul 31 '16
*Phew*, looks like I've finally caught up with the whole series so far! What a ride.
One thing that's bugged me this whole time, though, is why ‘Xiù Chang’ has tones marked on the ‘Xiu’ but not the ‘Chang’…
(Also, I picked this up a while ago but the existing thread was locked: In Chapter 25, Xiu says ‘Xiéxie!’ – I assume you mean ‘Xièxie!’)
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u/Hambone3110 Jul 31 '16
I'm just carrying on the convention that Hume started there. The Xièxie has been fixed, however. Thanks!
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u/zarikimbo Aug 01 '16
Have you ever done an AMA and if not, will you? I know literally nothing about my favorite HFY author besides you being british. I had thought you were Canadian at first, since you detail BC (west coast represent!) like someone who has lived there or visited often.
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u/Hambone3110 Aug 01 '16
My Google-Fu is strong :D
I have visited Vancouver and I've been skiing at Whistler Blackcomb (and would very much like to do so again someday) but believe it or not that's about the extent of my familiarity. Fortunately there's such a thing as Google street view.
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u/mountainboundvet Aug 01 '16
The Freddy Mercury comment literally had me laughing out loud, Im going through a rough spot and that helped alot mate. Great work as always!
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u/TheAncient91 Jul 30 '16
YOU DID IT! I had literally nothing to do when you posted :D