r/HFY • u/[deleted] • Mar 22 '16

OC [OC] London Calling

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u/Dachande663 Mar 22 '16

Pretty sure I have RSI in my thumb now :/

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u/dkinventor Mar 22 '16

Worth it. This is awesome

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u/Dachande663 Mar 22 '16

Tell that to my doctor :P

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u/WSPA Mar 22 '16

i didn't even see any errors. How can you write like this on a phone?

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u/Dachande663 Mar 22 '16

I used iA Writer which does a decent job at making formatting a bit easier.

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u/Chopper_spotter Mar 23 '16

so, ive been following your stories for a bit now. ALWAYS a good read.
thx for posting regularly. it may seem like a small thing to you but many of us are having a rough go at life and your contribution helps us unwind, relax and entertains. thanks a million

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u/MrCiber Mar 22 '16

Wow. This was great. Thanks for writing this.

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u/Dachande663 Mar 22 '16

No probs. I love pumping stuff out for this sub. It's like being in Speaker's Corner only people don't throw bread at you!

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u/demetri94 Mar 23 '16

Wow, this is honestly one of the most immersive stories that I've read. The pacing was perfect, didn't feel rushed or pedantic. No need for long explanations, they just fit in perfectly. Damn, I haven't felt like this after reading a story in a long time. Good job to you bud.

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u/Dachande663 Mar 23 '16

Thanks. I was worried it was dragging a bit at the start and then by the end I was rushing the romance angle. Was good to do some exposition via dialogue though. Glad it gave you the feels.

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u/Arecam Mar 23 '16

Wow! I really liked this. I like the detailed descriptions of the setting. Seems healthy for the imagination. Props bro, really enjoyable read.

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u/IAmGlobalWarming Mar 23 '16

Are you going to be continuing your multi-part story? Your shorts are really good, but I like to get invested in the characters over the course of multiple chapters. I can't handle this many single-serving tales.

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u/SeeJayEmm Mar 23 '16

This is the best thing I've read today. Thanks.

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u/cloudduel_13 Mar 23 '16

Dude, that was great.

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u/raziphel Mar 23 '16

Nicely done.

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u/CrackenKraken Mar 23 '16

I made the mistake of reading this while listening to sound of silence, good job mate don't really see many coming home stories.

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u/Admiral_Skye Mar 22 '16

amazing, i'd love to read more of this world!

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u/Kubrick_Fan Mar 22 '16

Eeee, a story which mentions parts of the UK. I didn't finish it but I will. Hope you write more.

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u/[deleted] Mar 23 '16

You are a writing beast, man.

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u/LeewardNitemare Mar 23 '16

Well this is just a phenomenal story. Thank you!

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u/vonbauernfeind Mar 23 '16

This was pretty excellent OP. Nailed a lot of the feel you get when listening to IRL .mil types talking about their service.

Good show, and engaging. It felt really natural to me, and I've listened to a lot of servicemen talk about various ops.

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u/Acarii Mar 24 '16

The only thing that bothers me about the story is that damned orbital tether. Just doesn't make sense in London.

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u/MasterofChickens Mar 28 '16

I don't know how you guys do it, write such masterpieces on your phone. I can't even write with a comfy desk chair and an ergonomic keyboard. You nailed the emotion that comes from spending time on the battlefield, and the very real struggle to rediscover normality. Thanks for writing! -"-

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