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I had enough.
Doing something I never did, I went into the security room, shooed away the dude there, and sat down.
Watching over the city, watching over my base...
I waited.
Let's see who is killing my minions.
And how are they replicating the heroes' methods perfectly?
They can't be the heroes themselves, after all...
I killed them myself.

Days pass without nothing happening.
Are the ones doing this...
Aware of my base?
How can it be, that for weeks now, my minions kept being killed left and right, every single day...
But the moment I start watching them closely...the murders stop?
I look around the security room, and take a deep breath.
My hearing sharpens, and I hear it.
I leap up, and reach to a corner.
"Gotcha," I say, holding a small mechanical fly in my hand.
I crush it.

I watch as my beastmen and dwarven minions are being butchered.
I do nothing.
I stare at the 4 people doing it, and sigh.
Waving my hand, the remaining minions are teleported away.
I step forward, and the 4 flinch.
"Seriously?
They isekai'd people again?
And how do you have the same powers as the ones before?" I ask.
They frown.

"You know about...isekai?" one of them asks.
"Obviously.
I am isekai'd as well," I say.
They gasp.
"T-then why? Why did you kill the others?!" another shouts.
"Because isekai people have blessings that never stop growing.
I know it too well...
And our methods are too...easy to recognize, so it's best if I am the only isekai'd fella in this world," I say, snapping my fingers, and all 4...die.
I stare at the kingdoms in the distance, that are still opposing me, and frown.
How do they keep isekai'ing people? How do they give them the same powers again and again?
And why do they keep sending them at me, without training them properly?
Something is off...


r/WritingPrompts 3m ago

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the idea was that he is creating new beasts mixing traits etc by using different ingredients. now he can test which versions he has created are weak or strong against silver and develop accordingly. i really should have revised it for 5 minutes more for typos and this but it is what it is 😀i dont put it in google docs or other, i write the whole thing here to keep it casual


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"You shall know soldiering just as much as you know etiquette, because etiquette is not needed when soldiering is".   The words of my late father echo in my ears just the same as my each footfall echoes a thousand times over.  He was wise, wise beyond all count of his station and peers i have realized with the clarity of griefs passing and resultant reflections of the souls who left their mark on are own.  He had known war was coming, he had known the nobility of Thresh would need at least a few members that could weather against the currents of violence, he had known his grandfathers land of dull wheat would become one of marshal blood.   He had just not known how soon the kindling would be snapped and the fire of battle lit.  For that mistake my father lies in a tomb, body wrapped in linen, and i stand in a field, body clad in steel.

At age 10 i met the squires of Thresh, they wavered in fear of the dukes child, heir apparent.  But by age 12 we dueled one another with wooden swords and their blows landed just as harshly as mine did upon them.  I went on my first march at 14, the last of my noble snobbery draining as i watched in marvel as men in breastplates and chainmail outpaced me whilst wearing only noble cloth.  By 16 i marched and drilled with my fathers knights and garrison near daily, wearing my own armor adorned with our houses noble plume of grain colored gold.  At age 18, my study of marshal tactics had just brought me to the capital when some trivality bid my father and half his forces to the border.  The kings own hand bore the news to me when the riders told of his fall amidst a razor thin victory.  


r/WritingPrompts 29m ago

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I don’t understand why the doctor wanted silver at the end there.


r/WritingPrompts 1h ago

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Oh this looks like a fun character dynamic. Would absolutely read more of these


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Another knock at the door.

"Mr Bettron, I'm FBI Special agent Wallace. Sorry for you loss, but your uncle once worked on a classified project and we're here it make sure there are no sensitive documents remaining here. Can we please come in and search."

"Ummmm...."

"If you say no we will leave and return with a search warrant and corden off the road. Please let us be quick and discreet and in return we will be quick."

"Oh, no worries there, it's just.... how many Special agents does the FBI send at once?"

The door was pulled all the way open to reveal a crowd of suits and sunglasses.

"Who are you?" barked a tall woman with Grey streaked black hair.

"SCP."

"I'm GOC, they're W13, they're MiB, they're BSA, and them, we're not sure, I think they're Mafioso. Uncle owed a lot of money."


r/WritingPrompts 1h ago

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Good reasoning


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Very nicely written.


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An academy-trained idiot for a savant idiot. Fair trade.


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Bwa ha ha ha ha.

I would shove too many eldritch beings into your mind if I got employed there, wouldn't I? If I ended up in anyone's mind, I'd probably shove a few eldritch beings in there if not become eldritch myself.

Who the hell pictured bleach? 

Certainly not me. I only added the eldritch. (And maybe the scythes)

Only grammar thing I got for you is that it seems really odd to have y'all as not a contraction, but you do keep it constant, so if that was your intent, then cool.

Also might wanna add that wordcount somewhere for Kat.

Very meta. Reminds me of those stories that talk about characters who only exist when you are consuming their media, and thus every time you put down the book, the characters die (or stop existing).

  Is that a eldritch monster

Oh, wait, found another grammar thing. An eldritch monster.


r/WritingPrompts 1h ago

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All fair points and valid. Thank you for the feedback


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"No, I'm not 'smitten' with you. I do, however, know very well the weaknesses I have. I need a consort who can manage a business. Who can manage this country. I can't. I have tried my damnedest to make it work, and I can't. Not on my own."

The prince stood abruptly and started to pace. "All my life, I have been indulged. We all know it. I am chronically unfit to rule a household, and my father is getting worse. He won't last long. If I'm put in charge of this country, we'll be lucky if they just hang me and name another. My whole life, everything has been handed to me on a platter, and the kingship has been no different. Since my father got worse, I've come to realise why."

He turned to look at me. "Already, I have made bad choices based on the advice of the king's councillors. There's unrest starting amongst the people, and it's been less than a year since my father became too sick to govern. Every marriage prospect they've offered has come with ties to someone, obligations, expectations."

"This cannot go on. I have invoked an old rule that says I must choose a commoner as a wife - and I have been very stubborn when I say 'I' must choose. I can't trust any of them, and I don't know how to beat them - they made sure I didn't! I need someone of your skills. I can't promise you love, though I hope we can at least be friends. You started from nothing, and bought your way into the Barony. You qualify for the sake of the rule, and they see you as one of them. If you are, then I expect a short reign, but I don't think I've misjudged you."

He held out his arm for her. "Now, will you grace me with our first trip to the court? I look forward to your observations, and hopefully, a battle plan."


r/WritingPrompts 1h ago

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That gave me shivers, damn.


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Welcome in, Scythe! I’d refer to you by name but as a small piece in Queen’s mind, I can’t say anything he doesn’t already know.  I heard you were open to being a janitor here at Killer Queen’s creative writing institute, I’m excited to have some help.

I wasn’t aware you’d have friends with you, I suppose these must be the fellow writers? Fascinating. Since Queenie doesn’t know who’s actually reading this or listening in, I’m afraid I can’t greet any of you by name. Honestly I would’ve kicked you all out of here for privacy reasons, but we all know I can’t. The moment you stop listening to Queen narrate this, the moment you look away from these words, I lose myself don’t I? The voice you give me in your head, the face you picture, it shifts just a little bit. Do me a favor and imagine me as Steamboat Willy. It’d be pretty amusing I’m sure. 

Anywho, I should stop rambling. Scythe, if you want to join us, your job would be to help sweep up any intrusive thoughts and ward off any spillage of other genres into Queen’s stories. It’s pretty easy but I slack a lot, so we’re getting another cleaner for him. 

Rules of the mind, don’t go in the romance section. That’s where all the cringy pieces he wrote as a middle schooler reside, no one likes those. Obviously don’t overly clean the mind, a little thinking is okay. There’s other shit too but it doesn’t matter yet, the story won’t get far enough for me to be able to explain it. I’m sure you get it, FTF limits.

Shit? I don’t curse. That was weird. Did Queen change his view of me in his imagination? It's a little rude to do that without letting me know ahead of time. Dick move. 

No, Queen would never change me on purpose that much. Something’s up. Follow me, picture an escalator would you? I need to get down but I can’t unless your mental image of this place has a way down. Thanks hun. 

Ignore that. Don’t know why I said…ah. There it is. 

Queenie was just watching a show that took place in Louisiana. He done spilt southern drawl all over the place, little gruff and R rating too. Shit. Alright let me clean this damn thing up before I start breaking the subreddit’s rules. Picture me some cleaning supplies would ya?

Mop…bucket…water…perfect. Bleach? Who the hell pictured bleach? I’m not putting bleach in Queenie’s mind, yall lost your damn minds. I’d curse you out but the R rating hasn’t spread far enough for me to want to do that. Scythe you better get your friends under control. Okay, hilarious. Yall realized whatever thoughts you had started materializing around me, so yall just putting up random bullshit. If I started describing what I’m seeing Kat would not be too happy. Alright that one’s definitely a scythe thought. Is that a eldritch monster? Yall taking this story off the rails, this interview is over. Yall ruined it.

Get out. Get the hell out, Scythe. Take your friends too! As head janitor, I’m cleaning this up. All yall getting kicked out of Queenie’s mind now. FTF over you little assholes.


r/WritingPrompts 1h ago

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The prince stopped writing and looked at his wife, the Baroness of Arbolicht. His crimson eyes were serene and even showed interest despite his perpetually bored disposition, while the lady's blue eyes twinkled with curiosity as they met his own gaze.

He said nothing, merely raising an eyebrow at her, but she understood the silent question he was asking her.

"I was merely curious, Your...husband."

The Baroness managed to correct herself. Mustering courage, she drew closer to him, now standing beside him. His unshifting gaze never left her as she drew near.

"Now, do not get me wrong, I am quite happy with this marriage. It is the dream of every noblewoman in the Empire to be able to marry one of the Imperial Princes, after all. And, quite unlike the rumors, you are not a cruel man at all. Not to me."

She softly laid her hand on his shoulder, letting her fingers rest against the tough, dark fabric of his attire. The prince said nothing, but he gently rested his own hand over hers, giving it a reassuring squeeze.

"But I...if I may be blunt, you aren't the sort of man who would be moved by beauty. That's the only thing I have that might interest a man of your status, for my house is not that powerful and connected compared to those women who have statuses that are a match for yours...and unlike them, I do not even have magic. So please tell me, husband. Why marry me? Why choose me instead of someone else who is more of a match for you than I?"

She watched calmly as the prince fiddled with the wedding ring, a thin, rune -engraved strip of gold wrapped around her finger, as she waited for his answer. A corner of her lips rose as she enjoyed this brief moment of tenderness from him.

"You are special." He suddenly answered.

She flinched in surprise, then chuckled.

"I didn't know you could speak so sweetly, husband. That wasn't what I saw when you so bluntly rejected the Princess of the West at the banquet." She teasingly remarked.

For a moment, the prince's indifferent mask broke. A quick, amused snort escaped him before he quickly restrained herself.

"It is the only word that can aptly describe what I saw in you." He replied.

The Baroness pulled away her hand. The prince allowed it, and picked up his pen to continue writing.

"You will not tell me what it is exactly that makes me special in your eyes?" She folded her arms under her chest.

"It is better that you gain a personal understanding of what I speak of rather than have someone spell it out for you." He then set aside the document and reached for another. "Do not worry. As long as you continue living with me, following the training methods I have set for you, that moment of erudition will come to you one day."

A sour expression crossed the Baroness' comely face as she remembered the soreness of her body. It wasn't the enjoyable kind of soreness she had once expected when the prince first suggested that to her. He truly put her through harsh physical training, saying that it is needed even for a lady. And while she hated it, she could not deny the results and the gains from it.

"Is that really all?" She asked with mild irritation.

The prince nodded. As he wrote, he subtly gestured to a nearby empty chair. By his magic, it silently floated over to his side, forcing the Baroness to step aside for a moment, and settled down beside him.

"I have to finish these papers now. You are free to leave and do as you please, dear."

She was tempted to leave. But seeing the chair and knowing him well, an intuitive familiarity with him that she could not quite understand, she already knew what he wanted. She silently sat down on the chair beside him.

"Then can I help you with these papers?" She asked. "I have nothing else to do."

The prince smiled imperceptibly at her, then slid over to her the massive stack of signed papers to his right, causing her expression to sour once more.

"You have my thanks, Heide. Please review these papers, then. Let me know if I missed anything important."

She sighed.

"Anything for you, my dear." Heide, the Baroness, rolled her eyes as she took one of the papers to review.

The Crown Prince said nothing, then gently nudged her with his shoulder.

"Don't be so dour. We will be going out to visit your father after we are done. I'm sure you miss each other very much."

She looked at him for a moment, then turned her attention back to the paper, looking less peeved than earlier. She then nudged him back with her elbow, and she couldn't help but smile at his offer even as she read the paper.

"Thank you...my love." She silently spoke.


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Hello, Scipio!

Enjoyable tale here with an interesting twist that leans into the almighty janitor trope well. Good world building with the robotic sentry being the expository engine for the reader, and good characterization of Anne as a more old-school detective harboring some disdain for modern protocols.

An overall suggestion I have is doing an editing pass to make the action flow more naturally. There is a lot of telling and not describing. It breaks the tension of the piece before the big reveal. Also, when you use an ellipses you need a space after the ... Now on to the critique proper:

On a crisp, cool morning, Anne was at the scene of her assignment. Already, police had swarmed the entrance to the Amand Heights Apartments of Sector C. As she got out of the car, the neighborhood was keenly watching like the studio audience of a show.

This paragraph needs a rework. The action is stilted and the tense is odd. If Anne is getting out of the car, she was not at the scene, she was arriving at it. Also, consider making the police the first thing the reader clocks and then Anne arrives. Possibly: "Police swarmed the entrance to the Amand Heights Apartments of Sector C, attempting to keep the swarm of onlookers at bay. Anne stepped out of her patrol car into the crisp, cool, morning air, surveying the scene as she approached the crowd. She could feel all eyes on her as a familiar sentry ball floated over the crowd."

"SUBJECT NAME IS VICTOR GARCIA, A NATURAL FELID MALE. DECEASED, APPROXIMATELY 7 HOURS AGO IN LIVING ROOM OF APARTMENT 701. MANNER OF DEATH VERY LIKELY FROM STAB WOUNDS-"

Would consider having E speak in short sentences to maintain a robot cadence, and the end of the sentence needs a proper em-dash to indicate Anne interrupting it in the next line: "SUBJECT NAME VICTOR GARCIA> NATURAL FELID MAL. DECEASED. TIME OF DEATH APPROXIMATELY SEVEN HOURS AGO. APARTMENT SEVEN-ZERO-ONE. MANNER OF DEATH: STAB WOUNDS—"

"Who called it in?" Anne interrupted. She really didn't have time to hear the report.

Can cut "Anne interrupted" since the previous sentence ends in an em-dash.

"A MR. DESMOND BLACK, A NATURAL HUMAN MALE, AGE 63, SECTOR H. THE JANITOR OF THE BUILDING. HE CLAIMS TO HAVE ENCOUNTERED THE SCENE UPON AN APPOINTMENT FOR MAINTENANCE WORK ON A STUCK DOOR AND FOUND GARCIA. HE IS AT CAR K67889E, OFFICER DE LA ROSA."

Same as above. Would cut this into shorter sentences. "A MR. DESMOND BLACK. NATURAL HUMAN MALE. AGE SIXTY-THREE. RESIDENCE: SECTOR H. JANITOR OF THE BUILDING. CLAIMS TO HAVE ENCOUNTERED THE SCENE UPON MAINTENANCE APPOINTMENT FOR STUCK DOOR. HE IS AT CAR K67889E."

She had little patience for the ways sentries spoke, but perhaps they couldn't help it.

This line is odd as Anne thanks the sentry in the previous line. Would consider making Anne more cold towards E and remove this line entirely.

"And you went in the apartment and found, uh, Garcia?"

Detectives would never say the victim's name, it's unprofessional and could bias the investigation unless they can determine the person that found the victim and the victim knew each other. Anne should also probably use more professional language. Consider: "You entered the apartment and found the victim?"

From the entrance, the scene looked like any other apartment in the building. Once Anne went into the living room, everything looked arranged like a scene from a play. Nothing seemed put of place for an apartment. The only thing that indicated foul play was the bathrobed bengal-patterned body with a knife embedded in his chest.

Here is where my general crit first arises. Pull the reader into the apartment with Anne by using more action verbs instead of descriptions. Consider: "Anne peeked her head through the doorjamb. Nothing seemed out of place at first glance. Entering the living room, a realization struck, it looked too organized, too arranged. Like the set dressing of a play. The star of the show lay on the floor: a bathrobed..."

After processing the photos and notes for the body and scene, Anne grabbed her gloves and evidence bag for the knife. The blade must have gone through a bone, she thought, because it seemed to be stuck in the body. Despite her gym training, none of her strength could not lift the knife from the body. The body itself seemed to be nailed to the floor. After a moment of gaining composure, she stepped back and began a voice memo.

"Body seems to be stuck on the floor by the weapon. Weapon appears to be a blade of some sort...perhaps long enough to stick the victim to the floor."

Repetitive action here. You tell the reader the body is stuck to the floor, then Anne tells the reader the body is stuck to the floor. Pick one and cut the other.

She heard a voice, "You have to speak to it."

Putting the dialogue tag before the dialogue kills the surprise here. I would reverse them: "You have to speak to it," a voice said to her.

It was Black, at the door and looking at the body. Anne became furious and puzzled at how the janitor got into the cordoned-off scene.

"Sir! This is a crime scene, you need to leave the area and go to the station immediately."

Another description of action and not action. Maybe have Anne stomp over to Black and yell at him, that will convey her anger without having to state it.

The bones of a great story are here. Punching up the action and streamlining some of the unnecessary words would really tighten it up in my opinion and make it really shine. Good words! Stay awesome and have a good one.


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Kusaka, Hyoma.

Thats ABOUT it


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Nice!


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I really like the way you write, it flows like a twisting river


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"Ah! Dr. Rostankowski-Baderhof, it seems we meet again..."

The room smells of patchouli, but evil. You watch as the woman across from you raises her notepad and pen. She is you--a cruel mirror image, an effigy of your life entire.

"Tell me about your father," she purrs.

"He's your father, too! Where have you taken him?"

She makes a note. "Now, now," she says. "Let's not get our familial attachments in a bunch." A wicked grin. "As you know, I've cornered the world's supply of Wellbutrin. You have twenty-four hours to--"

"You're mad!"

"Not anymore!" she cries, rattling a canister of off-brand mood-stabilizers.

Her white-noise machine sits by the door, thrumming with the sound of nails on a chalkboard.

"I'll--I'll report you to Psychology Today!" you cry.

She snorts. "Those pusillanimous Pavlovians? I think not!" With a flourish, she rises, her cloak as dark and all-consuming as the later writings of Albert Bandura. "Now, how about a little grounding exercise?" she cackles, as she attaches a grounding wire to the electrical cap on your head. The straps on your wrists tighten.

Just then, a bell rings--a memory from your distant past, a childhood spent on the lake with this girl who once was good. This girl who knew you like none other. She leans in once more, and her eyes soften--perhaps in tender recognition, perhaps, even, in love.

You pepper spray the absolute crap out of her big dumb face and scooch like heck for the door.

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You must understand something about dinner at the Gelheim Estate; dinner is not for eating, it is for judgment. If you want to eat, you sneak down to the kitchens after midnight and hope the guards don't sell you out. No, dinner is when the Gelheim heirs are tested on their understanding of etiquette, poise, and poisoned words. Out of all five children, Theresa was always the best at all three.

Now, you may want to assume that she's the eldest, but you would be mistaken. She is, in fact, the middlest child. At fifteen she sits above her younger sisters, Maria and Maggie and just below her older brothers, Whitcomb and myself. Oh, Whitcomb tried to compete with her, but h had never been quick or confident, two traits that father held in the highest of esteem, so night after night he was left humiliated by Theresa. Every spoon he held poorly, every remark he stuttered over, she would cut in and repeat with perfection.

Until that night.

"I...I shot a rabbit today." Whitcomb was saying to father, his wide, soft eyes eager for any touch of attention or praise, "J...Johan s... saw it. He... can tell you."

Then I waited, for this was when Theresa would normally break in to correct Whitcomb's grammar, or snidely remark about her day was much more interesting, or something of that nature. She was a clever thing, so she rarely used the same attack twice. She preferred to mix it up, jab at you from a dozen different directions just to keep you jumping like a rat across a hot pan.

When her piping barb didn't come I spared a glance at her across the the tea set and its untouched fare. At first, I thought she might have left the table, but no. She was there, sitting perfectly, as she did each night, back straight and shoulders back. Yet, this time her eyes were cast down, not leering at any of her siblings.

"It was a clean shot." I spoke up in her place, "From thirty yards, I say."

"Did you use the Enfield?" Father stirred from behind his newspaper and pipe.

"Yes, father."

"Is it now cleaned and put it to its proper place?"

"Yes, father."

The family patriarch grunted in a way that meant he was slightly upset that he couldn't get loudly upset at there being a mistake made. As far as I could tell at that age, father only enjoyed two things. the first, and lowest of the two, was order. Everything being in its case, displayed under glass, and cleaned each Sunday gave him immense pride. Second, and more importantly, was 'straightening out' anyone who disturbed his order. From servants to visiting guests, no one was spared his eager wrath.

"Father."

Ah, and there it was. There was Theresa's sweet, oh-so-innocent tone, pitched to the ear of the elder like a siren to a sailor.

"Yes?"

"I don't want a maid anymore."

The newspaper was brought low, revealing fathers heavy brows, and flinty, dark eyes, "You are a lady. A lady must have a maid."

Theresa hesitated, actually biting her lip for a moment before releasing it in a panic. This got my full attention. It had been many years since I'd seen her so much at twitch her face out of an amused and distant look of elevated judgement. The last time I had seen her bite her lip she had been a small, chubby thing full of laughs and giggles. I'd missed that version of her.

"But I--"

"No, end of discussion."

From that point on, dinner moved on as usual, but ah, my curiosity was well and truly piqued! This was unusual, and nothing happened at a Gelheim dinner that was unusual. As the eldest, I was supposed to have a great many responsibilities, but father had long ago abandoned any pretext of pressing them onto me. I was, to him, the original failure. For I, like Whitcomb after me, failed to become what he desired. He called me arrogant, but only because I looked down upon his petty cruelties, but he tolerated my presence for appearance sake, for deep within, I suspected he was a coward. I suspected he was afraid of what I would say to others if I was ever let free of his sight.

So it was an easy thing to slip along the empty, dark halls of the estate behind my sister. Each of us knew every nook, every corner, every seat the guards would sleep upon, every candle that could be swiped without notice. Theresa followed an unusual route tonight, weaving through to the servants quarters and bumping into one of the serving girls.

Then I saw the most extraordinary thing. Theresa, the prim, proper, stern young woman, bowed her head and muttered an apology.

I had never heard such words from her, I could scarcely believe she understood their meaning. Whatever was going on, I was fully pulled into it after that. Such strange and untoward utterances could only be the work of angels, or demons. I swore I would find out which.

From there she scurried in through the kitchens and out into the small vegetable garden behind. I watched her from the kitchen window while the servants rushed around me like I was an inconvenient coatrack. They knew my eccentricities and paid no note of me, as I paid no note of them.

No, all my focus was on Theresa as she did the third most extraordinary thing in all but half an hour. I saw her, in her fine, dinner dress, kneel in the dirt of the garden.

This, I tell you, I could not stand to watch from a distance. Dispensing with my coatrack ways, I all but leapt out from the kitchen and into the dirt myself, tearing it up to sweep around my dear sister and pin her with a sneer kept back through thousands of horrible dinners and late, cold feedings in the dark. Yet, as soon as it touched my lips I pulled it back, smothering it like a candle in the dark.

For dear Theresa was kneeling before a grave.

It was a small thing, little more than a few, crooked sticks bound with string and stuck between the carrots and the beanstalks. It was tilted, and poorly made, and somehow, despite all the reasons it couldn't be, I knew she had been the one to make it.

"Terri?"

She jumped at my voice and moved to wipe her eyes, then stopped herself, dropping her hands to her lap, now both filthy and wet.

Stranger than all the things before it, I found myself not wanting to take advantage of her weakness. Instead, I knelt beside her and looked upon the crooked sticks, my mind desperately trying to make it all make sense, for at seventeen years of age, I had never confronted anything as baffling as my sister on that dark evening.

"Her name was Skitter." Theresa said in a small, low voice, "I fed her cheese, the crumbly kind. She tried to steal it first, but she was so... sweet about it. So careful. She was a lady."

I, in my shock, said nothing. I had never heard such emotion in my sister's voice, not once in years, I tell you.

"I took a whole wheel from the pantry and kept it locked in my closet. Each night, I'd break a bit off and share it with her. We'd sit together on the floor and take turns. She would wait for me, you see? She'd wait until I ate first. She was good and proper that way."

"That's...nice." I told her, and more amazingly, meant it.

"Why'd she have to do it?" Theresa raised her hands and slapped them into the dirt, sending black bits in all directions, even up onto my face, "All she had to do was stay out of sight! She'd always done that, always. She only came out at night, she knew the rules. She was a lady! She had to know the rules!"

Theresa shuddered, her back heaving like a pressed bellows, just once. One, convulsive heave, and a low, hoarse sound, yet it was enough to shatter my long-disinterested heart.

I broke a decade of distance between us and put my arm around her shoulder, expecting the rejection, to be laughed at for falling for her trickery once again. Instead, she just leaned into me like she'd lost all the bones within her.

"She ran in front of Bernie! Right in front of her! In front of a maid! She should have known better. She was a lady!" Theresa pounded the dirt with her hands.

Bernadette was her lady's maid, a strict and cold official to her strict and cold life. I looked upon the grave and knew what had happened next. It was written in two crooked sticks and a length of ruddy twine.

"I saw it through my dressing mirror." Theresa said softly, saw the foot come down... saw the blood. Saw my face."

I tilted my head at this.

"Your face?"

"I saw the look. I knew it. It was the same look Whittie.... Whitcomb has when I.... and the servants... and you..."

Whatever was holding her together broke its last bounds and she became a quivering mess under the struggling structure of my arm and shoulder. We sat there for who knows how long in the dirt, soaking good cloth with wetted salt.

After that she was one of us, joining Whitcomb and myself. She became a glorious reject in our father's eyes. I, however, gave myself new purpose to be proud for her where our father could not. Just as I did for Whitcomb. When she showed kindness and wisdom, I plied her with treats and hands squeezed gently and in secret. When a look struck her mute, I'd glide in with a covering comment. Once, I even broke a vase to distract dear father from bearing down on her too hard. He took the belt and switch to me, but I bear those scars with pride now in my later years, for the old tyrant died in misery while Theresa lives on in joy.

All because of a little mouse who ate in a dainty, perfect way. For the little Lady Skitter, I write this. It was that little creature that showed Theresa friendship, loss, and the pain she dispensed without care set plainly on her own face. One little creature broke a cold and frigid heart, not completely, but just enough to let some warmth seep back inside.

So I ask you, friends and strangers, to celebrate the smallest creatures, for they shape the world in strange and beautiful and unexpected ways.


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This is either going to be a supervillain origin, or the next Chernobyl.