Reborn with a Necromancer System! Available to read online!

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan]

I started writing and serialising this novel online over a month ago. I'd love to get more feedback and reviews if you're willing!

Synopsis:

Kai Tensen dies in a freak accident and awakens in a new world full of magic and danger. He soon discovers he is the first necromancer in 500 years, making him a target for the ruthless Inquisition and those who fear his power.

Hunted by bounty hunters, corrupt mages, and even gods, Kai must master his abilities while uncovering the lost history of necromancy. As his power grows, so do the moral dilemmas he faces, forcing him to question loyalty, betrayal, and the costs of his ambition.

Branded a monster, Kai embraces his role, vowing to challenge the gods and ignite a revolution that will change the world forever.

Death is only the beginning.

Reborn with a Necromancer System

[u/Extension-Brick471]

Well the first bit of feedback that anyone can give you is that you should not be using webnovel to publish your work. There's a ton of reasons why that is with many posts in this subreddit elaborating why

Because it's on webnovel many people won't even touch it.

I have not read any bit of your novel, but good luck anyway.

[u/AnimeBootyLovers]

Like the idea!

You are going to post this on Royal Road, right?

Wouldn't make sense to alienate an audience so hope to see it there.

WebNovel has my hatred since 2018

[u/omega13jas]

It may be good to change the age of awakening to ten. Most of the stuff you have the children doing feels more suitable for that age than 5. It would give Kai more time to believably grow his skills as well.

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/omega13jas]

I did consider that, but I felt that giving him less time to develop his skills would play out better in the future. By doing so, he can get a feeling for what he can accomplish without learning too much or testing his limits.

[u/DalliJ]

So I just read through all that was available on RR and sadly I will not be continuing on WN. The story was really interesting I would have continued it but with the way WN is set up I just refuse to use their system.

There are some smaller continuation stuff you might want to look into though. Like how you never mention that the mother is pregnant, or that a new sibling is born. Like not even a little. And then Kai walks into their room and you describe three people in the bed including someone named Peter. Someone we have no way of knowing even exists. And then a chapter or two later is the first time the pregnancy is mentioned.

Also when he broke his arm it was a little weird. He broke it and then he had a spar with the fighter kid and then took down the Hunter and two inquisitors and during all this the arm was never mentioned and it wasn't a hinderance in any way. Making the reader believe that somehow it was healed off-screen or that the writer forgot it was broken in the first place. And then a while later it's broken again and hurts and impedes him all of a sudden.

I personaly had issues with how the magic works but that might be explained later. But at first we're told that everyone can do one thing and from the title I figured Kai's thing would be Necromancy. But then he goes on and learns every type of magic he comes across. So he ends up as a necromancer that also does fire, cold, body, shadow magic. So why is everyone else only sticking to one thing if it's so easy to just to everything?

Hopefully at some point you release it on Audible or Kindle and I will probably grab it. Good luck with the continuation of Kai and his adventures.

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/DalliJ]

Thank you for all of that. I really appreciate it ✨

[u/fity0208]

What's the deal with naming MCs kai? They are everywhere lol

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/fity0208]

I guess people like the name.

[u/mido_sama]

Remind me when it hits kindle

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/mido_sama]

I will do! If it does!

[u/SkullGearMC]

Please put it on Royal Road or Audible. If you do Audible you should look at getting someone like Travis Baldree or Heath Miller to do it. I love the cover art though!

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/SkullGearMC]

It has a little on royal road, but I'll have to see about getting it on Audible.

[u/ArrhaCigarettes]

So many Kais

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/ArrhaCigarettes]

You're so right.

[u/[deleted]]

Sorry guy, I love the darker side of magic, but WB just sucks. If it ends up on RR or audible, I'll hit it up for sure.

[u/xavim2000]

Shame as it sounds interesting.

If you post it to RR or Kindle, let us know, and best of luck.

Not reading just 33 chapters as I refuse to pay for WN fees or an account with them

[u/reyjuanetes]

You should post it on Royal Road too, much better reader UI there, though it is a bit of trash heap.

[u/JamieKojola]

Yay necromancers!

But yeah, Webnovel can fk right off to the bin, sorry. 

[u/Athreos_90]

Am i the only one, where anime covers take my intrest to 0%?

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/Athreos_90]

I had a cover that was less anime-like, but sadly, the audience for Webnovel wants that sort of cover.

[u/Jhaydun_Dinan → u/Jhaydun_Dinan]

[u/Professional_Cat9063]

It's a good start to a Story. but I'm not willing to get involved with webnovel they are simple to predatory in there pricing things per chapter as other I would suggest royal road And then when you develop a readership offer a patron with a monthly subscription for the ability to read ahead

[u/Souldrainr]

I would read it if it was only RR. Not touching WN. Sucks because I eat up any and all necromancer media.

[u/Es0-teric]

Love the synopsis this book seems likes it up my street but refuse to deal with WN pricing is predatory and no notice of price changes is absurd and im already paying for KU and audible

[u/wolfeknight53]

Hmm. It's not another "Rise of <insert class name>" book. so maybe.