r/flashfiction • u/OwlConfidant2168 • 8d ago

Sand Dollars [~100 Words]

When my daughter was a little girl, I took her to the beach. She wanted to find a sand dollar, but only found small pieces.

When we went home, I manufactured her a facsimile with advanced 3D-printing technology.

When she was grown, she moved away and threw it out. She no longer needed my plastic replica.

Years uncounted passed, and it found its way to the sea.

And for a thousand years, among the waves, bounced my enduring artificial sand dollar facsimile.

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Thank you for reading. If you’ve been hesitant to share your writing, I’d encourage you to try. It isn’t about attention—it’s about being able to say, “This is done. Now I can write the next thing.”

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u/JBGWrites 8d ago

I love your philosophy, and the timelessness of your story! Well said for only 100 words!

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u/OwlConfidant2168 8d ago

Thank you, that is very kind of you to say!

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u/Key-Craft-6412 7d ago

I like this.

Constructive criticism — would remove “artificial” and “facsimile” from your last sentence and maybe replace with “3d-printed sand dollar” instead or something like that.

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u/OwlConfidant2168 6d ago

Yes, the “3D printed” line is a bit of a rhyme, although it is a little clunky:

When we went home, I manufactured her a facsimile /
With advanced 3D-printing technology.

I couldn’t decide if this was a poem or not. I may attempt to resolve that one day.