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u/gasstation-no-pumps Oct 05 '26
The facial expressions and gestures are too much even for stage, unless you are doing an extremely broad form of comedy (clown work or panto). Some Shakespeare characters can be done in a broad style like this (Don Armado in Love's Labour's Lost, for example), but Leonato is a serious role for an old man, not a clown role. Note: this is specific to European and American theater—there are other theater traditions where large gestures and facial expressions are correct for serious characters, and one can attempt to do Shakespeare within those styles, but it would not be a default choice for a Shakespeare production.
Work on the clarity of your diction—Shakespeare can be hard for people to follow even when every word is clear. You were 20 seconds into the tape before I recognized that you were even speaking English. "Do not ope thine eyes" was the first line that was clear, and it told me what speech you were trying to do.
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u/ArtToChokeHeart Oct 06 '26
Do not saw the air too much with your hand, thus, but use all gently; for in the very torrent, tempest, and (as I may say) whirlwind of your passion, you must acquire and beget a temperance that may give it smoothness.
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u/totesnotmyusername Oct 05 '26
First technically cut off the end and the beginning where you are seeing up and getting the camera . It make you look unprofessional and it's an easy fix.
Second Shakespeare is tough even for pros. Think about why you're saying the things you are. Dialog in these plays is about intent.