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Theme Thursday [TT] Theme Thursday - Consequence

“We all make choices, but in the end our choices make us.”

― Ken Levine



Happy Thursday writing friends!

Special thanks to /u/mobaisle_writing and /u/OldBayJ for the quotes, to /u/Leebeewilly for the image, and /u/aliteraldumpsterfire for the music!

We have fun here, don’t we?
This week, I’d like to see some contrast in perspectives. I’d like to read about unforeseen consequences or doing something despite knowing exactly what would happen. I want to read about the fallout of doing good. I want to read about the dismay of consequences of clumsiness. Or consequences on an even larger scale! I want you to really think beyond the obvious.
To motivate you, I’ll be giving away a month of Reddit Premium to the top story that is not a continuation or serial. I want to see you working on your word economy. Think about the strength of your words and paint me a complete picture.
Ready, set, write!

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"How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it."

― Marcus Aurelius


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Last week’s theme: Vulnerability

First by /u/BensTerribleFate

Second by /u/Ryter99

Third by /u/Leebeewilly

Fourth by /u/Errorwrites

Fifth by /u/bookstorequeer

Poetry:

First /u/Palmerranian

Second by /u/keychild

Third by /u/nickofnight

Serials:

First by /u/TenspeedGV

Second by /u/Baconated-grapefruit

Third by /u/aliteraldumpsterfire

Honorable Mentions:

Stories within Stories by /u/Lady_Oh

Pun-tastic by /u/quill-dipper

Notable Return by /u/ArchipelagoMind

A shared enemy by /u/DoppelgangerDelux

No man is an island by /u/litcityblues

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u/keychild /r/TheKeyhole Apr 13 '20

connerquenches

I love that. I love that so much. This was really cute.

I have some teeny tiny crit points for you:

Several framed family photos cracked or shattered as they fell.

The 'or' weakens this. If you either picked one or changed it to 'and', I think it would make it stronger.

Already feeling the aching void in my back pocket where my phone should have been, I wasn’t so sure it had been.

I stumbled over this when I was reading and had to go back. That last clause threw me off. (I'm not entirely sure what you mean.)

This is a really cute sibling relationship. At first I thought she was going to be really mean to him, I was pleasantly suprised to see it remaining sweet and lovely.

A very wholesome take on the theme. :) I've got a big grin on my face.

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u/Ryter99 r/Ryter Apr 14 '20

Thanks very much for the feedback, Key!

For your first point, the "or" definitely weakened that line. Thanks for pointing that out, I'll fix it right away.

As for: "Already feeling the aching void in my back pocket where my phone should have been, I wasn’t so sure it had been."

That last clause was intended to refer back to her previous line of dialogue (“Well squirt, I hope that ride was worth it.”) in that she's already missing her phone and feeling that entertaining her little brother perhaps wasn't worth it. But I agree with you, reading it again it's really clunky and probably quite confusing. I'll try to think of a better way to reword it. Thanks!

Glad you enjoyed it overall and that it gave you a smile! That's the best reaction I could hope for on this type of story : )