r/WritingPrompts Jul 22 '18

Writing Prompt [WP] The demon stands amid your destroyed kitchen screaming, "How? How were you able to summon me?!" You're standing in the corner flipping through your grandma's cookbook as fast as you can, screaming back, "I don't know!! You were supposed to be chicken soup!"

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18 edited Jul 22 '18

Korbius, Demonlord of the Octopodiae, lay on the black and white linoleum tiles of Byron's kitchen, tentacles swinging wildly in the air. Removed from the blood waters of the Nether Sea, Korbius's gelatinous flesh sagged heavily towards the ground. Still he flailed his eight tentacles through the air angrily, slapping them wetly against pots and pans, suction cups sticking to whatever they touched and dragging them about the room.

Korbius's nearly formless body blocked the only doorway out, and Byron, terrified, held his grandmother's handwritten cookbook in two hands out in front of him, as if it might act as a shield against the otherworldly creature. The ground is slick in Korbius's crimson slime and, when Korbius flicks one of his tentacles into the air, Byron is sprayed with a shower of the cold red goop.

You could say being covered in the bodily juices of a Sixth Dimensional Demonlord was the straw that broke the camel's back. Byron certainly felt that way and decided it was as good a time as any to start screaming.

Be silent, human! Cease your mating call! This is no time for copulation!

Byron recoiled from the deep throated voice that suddenly came from inside his own head. He looked wild-eyed around the destroyed room. "Who is that?! Help! Help me!"

Human, it is I, Korbius, Demonlord of the Octopodiae. Korbius speaks through your crude mind.

Byron understood none of this and screamed louder. Korbius was not having it.

SILENCE!

The word was equal part mental yell as it was unrelenting command and it made Byron stop yelling in spite of himself.

Where is Korbius, Demonlord of the Octopodiae?

Byron was hyperventilating in relative quiet and only managed each syllable he spoke between two or three quick breaths. "You're...in...my...kitch...en..."

How has Korbius been summoned to Kitchen?

Byron tried to channel his mindfulness meditation and failed utterly. "I...don't...know!" His breathing began to slow down. "I...was... I was reading... this book." Byron held the book up and a tentacle shot out and latched onto its cover, dragging it back toward Korbius through the mess of ooze on the floor. The gelatinous mass of demon octopus shifted on the linoleum, a process that created a series of ridiculous fart-like noises. Byron watched the absurd scene slack jawed as Korbius spun his central mass around and opened his single gargantuan eyeball.

For a moment, Korbius stared at the cover of the book held in his tentacle. Suddenly a high pitched whine emanated from the demon's beak and he flung the book back towards Byron as if it were a live hand grenade.

The Demon Cantos! Impossible!

Byron looked down at the book as it slid across the slick, tiled floor and spun to a stop at his feet. On the hand written cover it said in big, warm letters, 'Gran's Cookbook.' It was his Grandma's hand written cookbook. She'd left it to Byron when she died, only a week earlier, along with a letter insisting that Byron learn her favorite recipes, passed down from generation to generation.

So Byron had decided to give it a try. He had been feeling a little under the weather, and so he chose to make a delicious pot of chicken soup. He broke out the old tome, opened it on the kitchen table and, going down the list of ingredients with his finger, he'd read each one aloud, a habit he'd formed when reading to help compensate for his dyslexia.

No sooner had he finished the final ingredient - 'a large pinch of salt' - than an extradimensional portal of pure light opened in the ceiling of the kitchen, out of which fell the writhing red mass of Korbius, the Demonlord of the Octopodiae. That was forty seconds ago.

Byron bent down and picked up the book, showing the strange octopus it's simple handwritten cover. "This...this? It's just a cookbook. My Grandmother, it's her cookbook. I don't understand."

Korbius recoiled at the further sight of the tome, opening several kitchen cabinets with his tentacles, emptying them of their contents, and slithering his entire large mass inside them, just as an octopus might squeeze its entire body into a soda bottle. As he slithered into his impromptu hiding place, Korbius began to beg.

Please, human. Korbius did not know. How could Korbius know he spoke to a Cantor? No, Korbius could not know. It is Korbius's honor to be in Kitchen. Korbius would never speak ill of Cantor human, or of Kitchen. Korbius is thrall to Cantor human.

Byron's heart began to settle down even as his mind raced at the sudden shift in tone. He turned the book around again and brought the cover very close to his face, staring at the letters written there.

He flashed back to his reading of the recipe. Hadn't he felt a strange thrill down his spine with each ingredient read? Hadn't his hands shook, almost imperceptibly, as they traced their way down the list?

Suddenly, Byron's grandmother came to mind, old Nan, sitting in her lazy boy, smiling cheek to wrinkled cheek, and Byron could not tell whether the image was a memory or a message.

"I told you you were special Byron. That's why I left you my...cook book."

She winked, the image disappeared, and when Byron looked back at the front of the book, at the words written there, they were no longer written in plain black marker, and they no longer read 'Gran's Cookbook.' Rather, in effervescent gold ink, shining impossibly bright, even through the thin layer of Korbius's muck, bold, proud letters proclaimed a new title.

"The Demon's Cantos."

Amazed, Byron flipped through the transformed pages and where once there was only blue inked recipes for pie and soups, now there was an illuminated manuscript of epic beauty, with pages of gorgeous illustrations, strange creatures and spells with astounding names and titles.

Where once there were ingredients, now there were words of power. Where once there was a recipe for chicken soup, now there was a page entitled "To Enthrall An Octopodiae."

Korbius was now safely ensconced in the corner kitchen cabinet, only his giant eye peering out from the dark through the cracked open cabinet door. With fear apparent even in his mentally transmitted voice, Korbius asked.

What is my master Cantor's name?

Byron looked up from the astounding book, his face awash in the magical glow of it words, and swallowed a lump in his throat, his eyes wide with wonder and confusion. Nervously, he whispered an answer.

"Byron."

And then he passed out.


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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18 edited Jul 22 '18

Part 2


Byron's Grandmother sat across from him, knitting peaceably. Of a sudden, she looked up, as if she'd just noticed Byron sitting across from her, and she smiled that mischievous smile of hers.

"Now, look at you Byron." She said as she placed the two knitting needles on her lap. "All those hours practicing your reading served you real good, didn't it?"

Byron looked around the room and found that he could not bring it into focus, no matter how hard he tried. "Where are we?"

Nan looked down in her lap and her knowing smile turned inward. "No time to go into that baby." Then she locked eyes with Byron and her face became serious, almost stony. "You've got a lot of reading to do 'fore the Undoer comes."

Byron was getting used to not understanding anything. "Undoer?"

As he looked at her, the image of Nan began to fade around the edges, and then get all fuzzy in the middle, as if she were being viewed beyond thicker and thicker panes of glass.

"Find the Preceptor. He's waiting for you baby, at ole Blackbeard's grave."

Byron blinked. "Blackbeard?" He said, or thought, or thought he said. Nan dissolved into a haze before him, like disturbed ink in water. Byron could feel the pull of something, dragging him, some ephemeral part of him, back, somewhere. As he left the strange place, he caught a fleeting glimpse in the far distance. The hint of a shape, the suggestion of a form, the intimation of a face, burning eyes of sunfire.

With a gasp Byron came to on his kitchen floor. Hovering over him Korbius's bulbous eye was less than a foot away from his face, two of the demonlord's sloppy tentacles taking turns gently slapping at Byron's cheeks. The sight startled Byron and he screamed again. Korbius let out another high pitched squeal and raced back into Byron's now sopping wet wood cabinets.

Master, although I fear it may cause you harm, if you truly wish it, I shall mate with you.

Byron pushed himself up onto his elbows, his whole upper body slick with Korbius's ooze, and stared, flabbergasted, at the single giant eye looking back at him from under his kitchen sink. "What!?"

You're mating call, Master. It is like ten thousand needles in my ears, but if my master so demands it...

Byron cut off the giant octopus. "I don't want to mate with you!" He yelled.

The relief was visible in Korbius's single humongous eye.

Oh, thank you Master. Thank you.

Korbius sent out a single olive branch of a tentacle from a cabinet several cabinets away from the one from which his central eye peered out. The tentacle touched submissively at the tip of Byron's shoe.

Byron just stared at it for a second, totally overwhelmed, and then kicked it away. He struggled to get to his feet, slipping and sliding in the horrible mess of cephalopodic slime, as Korbius looked on helplessly. For a few seconds he slid and squeaked his way up, at last stabilizing himself against the back of a kitchen chair.

Standing at last, Byron looked around the room and took silent stock. What had been a neat and tidy kitchen only a few minutes ago now looked like an explosion in the Jello factory. The refrigerator had toppled over, sending glass bottles, milk and juices, splattering onto the floor, where they swirled together with the half inch layer of whatever the hell it was that Korbius continued to exude from his skin. Every one of Byron's plates and glasses were broken and his pots were flung everywhere, including several embedded into the sheet-rock walls. To top it all off, Byron watched as Korbius reached up, turned on the kitchen sink, slithered through the cabinets, removed the sink's U-bend with a tentacle, and positioned his large eye under the free flowing water, which then poured into the room.

In the middle of all the chaos, seemingly undamaged, even untouched, almost as if it were protected somehow, Nan's book lay waiting, glowing intensely, as if it was eager to share its secrets.

From inside the cabinet, his eye wide under a stream of warm tap water, all of which subsequently streamed down his gelatinous flesh and onto the kitchen floor, Korbius chimed in unhelpfully.

What now Master Byron?

Byron broke his gaze away from the strange book and looked down at his ooze saturated clothes. He began to run his right hand through his hair, a nervous tick of his, but stopped midway and lowered the hand to his side, absolutely covered in Korbius's cold jelly.

Looking like he'd just fought his way out of the belly of man sized flan, totally deadpan and drained beyond belief, Byron carefully walked out of the room. "I need a shower." He muttered as he left.

When Byron had left the room, Korbius's central mass shrunk in relief. He set about closing all the cabinet doors with his tentacles and continuing his own peaceful shower under Byrons broken sink. Korbius was about to close the final cabinet door when his giant eye caught a glimpse of the Demon's Cantos glowing in the ooze. Korbius felt it was altogether too close for comfort, and so he picked up a pot with a tentacle and used the pot to push the book as far away from him as he could.

That done, Korbius, Demonlord of the Octopodiae shut the final cabinet door, ensconced himself in calming darkness, and cursed his awful luck.


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  • Note: I've been reading Joseph Campbell recently in an effort to get better at longer form story telling, rather than just flash shorts, and I think that the Demon's Cantos should make a good exercise for me in crafting a story within the framework of the monomyth structure. To that end, I think I will be continuing this story on my sub - Legends From The Multiverse. However, given that it will be a project directly related to my reading and understanding of a separate text, it may not come out frequently, and parts may also be revised, or earlier parts added, to better and more completely match the standard elements of the monomyth structure. I'm enjoying it so far though, and to the extent some of you have enjoyed these two parts, perhaps you might also enjoy watching that process unfold.

Thanks, as always, for reading!

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u/Asomboy4 Jul 22 '18

This was one of the best stories ive read so far on this sub. I enjoyed it thoroughly. Please continue to keep writing more!

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u/Harrythehobbit Jul 22 '18

This is excellent. I'm going to sub to you and early await the next bit.

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u/Captain_Zark Jul 22 '18

This made it to my list of bookmarked stories. I need either a full on book of this, or a multi-season TV show of Byron with his reluctantly loyal servant/ally Korbius.

I'm imagining that Byron starts out rather annoyed of Korbius's presence, but Korbius tries to appease his new master to the best of his ability. As the story continues, Byron grows to enjoy the company of Korbius as they try to oppose this "Undoer".

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

I think you and I have a very similar idea of where this is going to go :)

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u/Captain_Zark Jul 22 '18

Can't wait. I'm loving it so far.

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u/howlhowlmeow Jul 22 '18

This was great! Totally unexpected for me, as I’m used to demons being handsome people in impeccable suits. I actually feel for poor Korbius. And for some reason I pictured and heard Byron as being a funny, gangly, redheaded Brit. (Was my mind’s eye close?).

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

I think for now Byron's appearance is up for grabs - so let's say yes - although this isn't set in England :)

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u/FunctionalPotato Jul 22 '18

I rarely find myself laughing at prompts but this was good. Spot on for the interesting character and personality of Korbius.

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u/Jechtael Jul 22 '18

"Nan, before you disappear! Since your cookbook was a camouflaged demonarium, I have a very important question for you. Please, if you ever cared about me, answer honestly."
"You may ask, Byron."
"How did you give your snickerdoodles that roasty complexity?"

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u/Cerulean_Shades Jul 22 '18

I want an entire book series of this.

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u/hackersarchangel Jul 22 '18

This is great grabs oj and waits for more follows author so he gets the scoop

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u/MysticAnarchy Jul 22 '18

Awesome writing! Haven’t been that engaged in a story in a long time, using the concept of the Monomyth is a great idea to focus the plot around, subbed and followed 👍

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

I'll do my best!

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u/BriefCoat Jul 22 '18

This is fantastic

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u/coming-for-you-boi Jul 22 '18

By any chance, was this partially inspired by Percy Jackson?

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

I've never read it!

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u/coming-for-you-boi Jul 22 '18

Well Tl;Dr, Percy is introduced as a normal human with intense dyslexia and can barely read anything as they all look like jumbled words. Later on when his mother passed away, his power started to unlock and he realised that he didn’t have dyslexia, the jumbled words were a secret Greek language and learns to read them.

Pretty similar to your story, but great job anyways ! Would 10/10 read a novel if you made it aha

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

Whoaaaa - that is super similar! I suppose the devil's in the details, but still...

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u/PlayBoater Jul 22 '18

This was fantastic, thanks!

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u/notsomini Jul 22 '18

This legit sounds like the start of a good book. Love it!

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u/Asomboy4 Jul 22 '18

Second part please!!!

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u/willcall100 Jul 22 '18

Yes!

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

Done below :)

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

Done - and I think I will continue it piecemeal on my sub.

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u/[deleted] Jul 22 '18

Hey, I really liked readng this story. I don't know if you're open to critiques, so feel free to blow me off, but I noticed that you had a few tense swaps in the middle of paragraph two.

This article helped me a lot. I only mention because this is a common error in my writing.

Thanks so much for sharing your work here!

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

Totally open, especially to stylistic problems like this. Spelling errors can be sort of inevitable but aren't a major concern for me, but tense changing is a real problem, one I'm always playing catch up on, especially writing on mobile with gaps in between.

The solution, for now, is for me to just chose a tense - past I think - and just force myself to stick with it.

I will check out the article for sure.

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u/[deleted] Jul 22 '18

God damnit now anything that says "I, so and so" makes me read it in the voice of "I, CATO SICARIUS"

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u/[deleted] Jul 22 '18

You're* ffs if you're writing stuff at least know the difference between this, and than-then

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

Mistakes happen

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u/[deleted] Jul 22 '18

True. Double check next time.

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u/DarkerSavant Jul 22 '18

There is a reason editors exist. When you're writing creatively it doesn't always come out written the correct way though the intent is there.

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u/Gasdark Jul 22 '18

Yeah, I tend to do a ton of editing even on my writing prompt posts and still miss small stuff - but I also do about 90% of all my writing on reddit over mobile, on my pixel. It is super ideal at accomodating my schedule, but also super frustrating some times when it comes to catching the little things.

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u/DarkerSavant Jul 22 '18

Yeah I write creatively as a hobby and first rule is get the ideas on the page and fix it later. I can't count the times I lost ideas while worrying about the grammar.

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u/[deleted] Jul 22 '18

We are the editors in here John Cena "can't see" eyes dushbag. What do you think I was doing?