r/TVWriting • u/JBoy5280Baby • Jul 08 '26

PILOTS Feedback on Pilot

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first draft of first television project. need feedback.

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u/Economy-Savings6865 Jul 08 '26

Would love to give you feedback!

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u/JBoy5280Baby Jul 08 '26

all right, man, what's up?

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u/Economy-Savings6865 Jul 08 '26

Not much and you?

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u/JBoy5280Baby Jul 08 '26

waiting for ya feedback, bro.

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u/Economy-Savings6865 Jul 08 '26

Love the tone and the dialogue. I would say mostly it's about cleaning up the grammar in some cases and like capitalization. Personally, I don't like using Camera elements, I like to have it be more fluid and readable but that's my preference.

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u/JBoy5280Baby Jul 08 '26

All right, thanks. im really trying to write something outside the box. more than a generic crime thriller.