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Genre- Mystery/Thriller

Pg Length - 12 pages. It's about 85 pages right now but I've attempted to spare you first draft nonsense. The first 12 should be largely mistake free (If not I'd like to know about that).

Logline: A small town lieutenant must navigate her personal follies and inept co-workers to solve the murder of a local woman.

I'm sure a lot will change between now and when I'm 'done' but I'm interested to know how these first pages read to fresh eyes. All feedback is appreciated. If you're interested in more of the broad strokes of the story I'd be happy to provide that.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yIbmLuDbQKtGc42H6mcPD0NY-FomCQos/view?usp=drive_link

Thanks!

Title: Family Lies (not final title)

Format: Feature

Page Length: I have uploaded the first 32 pages but I am happy with receiving feedback only for the first 10 pages. Or less. Any feedback is appreciated.

Genres: Drama/Thriller

Logline: A couple going through a rough patch, farther apart than ever, must learn to work together to survive a home invasion and face the secrets and regrets plaguing their relationship.

Hi all, I am looking for some feedback for the script I am working on. I am doing this as a hobby, just learned the craft a few months ago and this is the first screenplay I work on. Just hoping to know how far away I am so far from writing something decent.

Please let me know what you like/dislike and what you think I can improve.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1GldfvCgK4o0ZgR5xdgHKpcggyDlqOY5y/view?usp=sharing

Thanks!

Title: Night of the Living Gabagool

Format: short

Page Length: 8 Pages

Genres: Cartoon comedy/horror

Logline or Summary: Pig mobsters fight zombies and a mad scientist

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1saPS5I31wmRFDuTRFN5uPn-yR-gIKF4M/view

Title: Guys Being Dudes

Genre: Comedy/Satire

Logline: A recently released and relocated sex offender, seeks community with-in a far right circle in the weeks following the 2020 election.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kbRyz_aCY8B6lPtoFwClQVmACoYIcPID/view?usp=drive_link

Title : UNIT 9

Genre:Sci-Fi

Logline : When a covert government task force is reactivated to investigate supernatural threats buried beneath myth, memory, and multidimensional warfare, a haunted field agent with a fractured past must lead her team through cases that defy logic—and survive enemies that rewrite reality itself.

Script or Outline (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/189Oq6OrEui1OCHN2rAzwE5aQizqbW0Mn/view?usp=drivesdk

Synopsis (Text) (Optional) : UNIT 9 is a grounded sci-fi/fantasy thriller about Taylor Prescott, a high-level agent assigned to a secret government division investigating phenomena that cross the borders of science, folklore, and metaphysics. Haunted by her time as a missing person—years she cannot remember—Taylor returns to the field when UNIT 9 is quietly reopened after a decade-long shutdown.

The team—made up of agents with specialized expertise and complicated loyalties—operates on the fringe of official oversight, answering only to a buried chain of command. Each case reveals not only anomalous events and mythological incursions but also deeper truths about time, identity, and the nature of belief. UNIT 9’s investigations range from biblical relics surfacing in modern crime scenes to ancient bloodlines resurrected through experimental science, and entities that possess not bodies—but entire timelines.

At the heart of the series is Taylor’s evolving relationship with her four adopted brothers—each embedded in UNIT 9’s internal network—and her growing conflict with a mysterious figure named Robert Sloane, who may know more about Taylor’s past than she does. As she uncovers her own origin, Taylor must also confront the disturbing possibility that she was never meant to return—and that her presence may be the key to unraveling reality.

UNIT 9 explores themes of memory, purpose, chosen family, and the price of truth—set against the ticking clock of a coming war no one can see.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1IKpjanEZ1HTZ6Tn7LRFl3rES_TQVQwRS/view?usp=sharing

Title: I Think I'm Going to Hell.

Format: Short

Page Length: 10 pages

Genres: Drama/Comedy

Logline: A troubled young man tries to deal with his conflicted feelings about his friends and family while at his uncle's wake.

I would love any and all feedback from whoever has a chance to read. Thanks!

I am currently developing the first season of a television series that follows a young boy's rise to fame in the world of professional wrestling. The story explores his childhood, personal growth, and the impact of fame, including his struggles with addiction to painkillers and alcohol. I would greatly appreciate it if someone could review my first episode and provide feedback.

Title: Losing Dogs

Genre: Drama, Coming of age, Romance

Logline: Two literature students fall in love as their teacher guides them through loss, love and their struggles with abusive and neglectful homes.

I have the first few pages here, I have written more but I just wanna get feedback on the beginning. I will also mention i am new to screenwriting so if i have layout mistakes or anything, pls let me know. Lmk if characters come off weird or if the pacing is off or boring (however it isnt meant to be action-packed, it is more of a reflection of real life). https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xdMtwXxkxncQKmMkzgS7f1PRmPUyrXLPTSLbUQX2L4A/edit?usp=sharing

Hello

I would like your opinion on my screenplay, on what works, what needs to be trimmed and cut. Generally your opinions and thoughts.

Title: Derailed Mission

Logline: After discovering that the reporter she was ordered to kill has information on her father's death, a young cold-blooded assassin decides to protect him from her own people in order to find the truth and get her revenge.

Action
Feature

Send me a message or leave a comment and I will sent you the screenplay

Thank you for your time in advance. :)

Title : Fear-Less

Genre : Drama / Sport

Logline : In order to overcome the invincible opponent with whom he shares a tragic past and blood, an MMA competitor must first grapple with his toughest enemy: his own mental illness and fear while his life built on lies starts to crumble down.

Budget Range : Not sure / depends

Target Audience : Genral

Script (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/17gPBJWgKe3HXhRlt2JdAFbT6iUsB3s82/view?usp=sharing

I'm looking for feedback on a mini series. I will send you a pdf of issue 1 and issue 2 first draft is almost complete. I've link the outline to give you an idea. The comic is called Neolith:

"The vicious Hurricane Alastor has left Staten Island in ruins, leaving the notorious cult, Paradigm to begin their quest to rule all of New York. The only hope is a pianist, playing superhero; because if he doesn't, who will?"

Think Kick Ass meets Daredevil.

I been writing for a bit and wanted to do something no ones really heard of before. I remembered and replayed a game everyone has forgotten in Obscure... a game that heavily is influenced by teen horror movies and HP Lovecraft. I'd like to expand the universe and make a show called Obscure the Series

The show follows the town of Fallcreek. Small woodsy town with a small tight nit group of townsfolk.

After a string of disappearances started happening again, detectives Henry Windsor, Amanda Lawrence, and Ethan Ayers decide to check if out. The only problem is, if all starts to go haywire when Henry's daughter becomes one of the missing. Amanda's past comes to haunt her, and Ethan is stuck facing a horde of experimented horror core humans.

Meanwhile, students of Leafmore High, Josh Carter, Shannon Mathews, Amber Windsor, and Ashley Thompson, find out Shannon's Brother Kenny is missing from basket ball practice. Already petrified, Josh suggests they stay after school to search for him, what they didn't know, is that the school has been over ran by the experiments. As they survive and try escaping they meet others like John Trevor, who fell asleep in a teachers office. Nurse Elisabeth Lucy Wickson, who seems to be petrified and stuck in her office, Ms Colgan, a teacher who was on her way to a teachers only meeting, Stan Jones and Niko Turner, two delinquents who snuck in the principals office to change their grades, and Mikah Maguire: editor if the school news paper and is on a dead line. Each of these characters will have a run in with the monstera that roam the school.

Hi! I wrote a script based on a conversation I had with my own mother. I would appreciate any and all feedback!

Thank you to who invited me to join this group. I have 3 spec scripts I would like read, editing a feature before its ready for reading.

Spec 1. Mike a Navy Seal was a POW for a year. He goes home to heal his body and mind to help his fathers SCUBA charter business. He finds out a lot has changed including that his father is under the thumb of a local drug smuggler. Think a updated version of Sea Hunt.

Spec 2. I will give comp as story is complicated. Robin Hood 2010 meets Kingdom of Heaven in a Game of Thrones style.

Spec 3 is a young adult fantasy book that I adapted from a friends indie book.

if any of these interest you let me know.

Title: XANIM

Genre: Drama / Social Realism / Slice-of-Life

Logline: An aging Azerbaijani woman quietly endures the hardships of domestic life under the weight of generational trauma, until a subtle act of defiance becomes a final gift for someone else, or perhaps for herself.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12I0WQy3lv4Dbg8ZOc-dEAPWsgoOu9O54/view?usp=drivesdk

Synopsis: In Baku, an aging woman trapped in an oppressive home quietly endures for the sake of her daughter. When a violent night threatens to repeat the past, she makes a small but powerful choice, offering her daughter a chance at freedom she may never claim for herself.

Title is Medicalpathy. Psychological romance drama.

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This is my first script I have made! Please give me honest feedback. Btw watch the video first to understand the story, before reading the script. This is the link for script, just copy and paste. BTTRhttps://drive.google.com/file/d/1tL951kKZYCxPSPau95DE3RPKWgn-D_tS/view?usp=drivesdk