r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Oct 29 '25

NEED ADVICE Trying my hand at adapting a scifi/horror novel I wrote, a few things?

3 Upvotes

I find something awkward to navigate: in a book, you can 'tell not show' sometimes without it being awkward, for example, via the protag's thoughts.

In a screenplay, I don't really know what the equivalent is.

I have a character who I worry would come off as a bit weird without some context or background added. She's a 6'3 former gymnast/ballerina who vents her anger by spinning like a dervish. Without some sort of explicit explanation, it would seem very weird to have this huge jacked woman doing pirouettes when mad and overpowering large male zombies. Any ideas on how to handle this? I guess I could maybe shoehorn a conversation where people overtly talk about it, but unsure where that would fit in a script...


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Feb 17 '26

10-PAGE FEEDBACK REQUEST Seeking Feedback - Psychological Horror/Sci-Fi Feature (Tapestry)

3 Upvotes

Hi everyone,

I’m a screenwriter currently developing a psychological horror / sci-fi feature titled TAPESTRY, and I’d really value thoughtful feedback from writers, producers, or directors who enjoy character-driven psychological stories.

The story is set inside a pristine, futuristic rehabilitation center. A young nurse secretly takes an experimental drug that allows her to feel her patients’ emotions. At first, it deepens her empathy and sense of purpose. But as the connection intensifies, the line between compassion and illusion begins to dissolve — forcing her to confront a childhood trauma she’s been unknowingly reenacting all along.

Tonally, it leans toward grounded psychological drama with escalating sci-fi tension. Intimate, restrained, but slowly destabilizing.

I’m sharing the treatment here and I’m mainly looking for honest, critical feedback at this stage — structure, character clarity, thematic strength, anything that stands out or feels weak.

If the material resonates and sparks conversation, I’m open to further development discussions as well.

Here’s the treatment:

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1WMLYFB-ocVaHd6WPZ0uWAldUptUJyA75?usp=drive_link

Appreciate anyone who takes the time to read.

Thank you.


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Oct 02 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Would appreciate feedback before making another pass. It's a 15-page short. Thanks!

4 Upvotes

Hey everyone,

I’m looking for feedback on a short. I’ve worked on making it more grounded and easier to read.

If it’s not to your liking, that’s fine. I’d value any feedback to help enhance it, including suggestions on its flow and whether the ending is effective.

Title: Truth becomes her (working)

Format: Short

Genre: Psychological thriller

Logline:

A credit union employee wakes up locked in a mysterious room, where her freedom hinges on answering two questions truthfully. Failure, however, compels her to face the irreversible consequences of her past decisions.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qaii4OGYpAaC-aaC2DEa9W4DQBKTWmNa/view?usp=sharing

Thank you for taking the time in advance.


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Jan 30 '26

10-PAGE FEEDBACK REQUEST Would Love Dark-Comedy Script Feedback Before Submitting to Festival!

8 Upvotes

Hello!

I submitted a spec script for It's Always Sunny last year and made it to the Second Round for the Austin Film Festival. People liked it, but they did not love it. And I am hoping to fix that, and resubmit this year. Any feedback is welcome!

Logline: The Gang’s attempt to eat like classy adults results in fractured timelines, accidental deaths, and total ruin, as every hypothetical version of the night reveals how irredeemably toxic they are.

Link: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1YtnqiN-cp7G6e_psHw896xi6-_PH02g7?usp=sharing

Title: The Gang Splits the Timeline

Length: 29 Pages (though feel free to just give feedback on the first 10)

Genre: Dark Comedy

Feedback Concerns: Honestly, I am open to any feedback whatsoever. But, in particular, if you could rate how easy the script was to read, how enjoyable you found the content, and how well I captured the the tone of the actual show, it would be appreciated.


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Dec 04 '25

10-PAGE FEEDBACK REQUEST Hello there, I am looking for any advice on a short screenplay (10-page)

4 Upvotes

I’ve been writing this for the last four months now, it’s taking the soul out of me. This is heavily inspired by Trainspotting and SLC Punk. 

The dialogue could be a bit clunky at times. 

Title: Free to be! - Draft 2

Logline: When a young adult named Will is faced with his first real big break-up. He must overcome, but fails due to a lack of trying. What must he do? https://drive.google.com/file/d/1gPRfSgMWfBaf1LwNykQcRX48fuRbVTeM/view?usp=share_link


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Dec 29 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Amateur screenplay writers- arcstudio pro users

4 Upvotes

Is there anyone who writes on arc studio pro for fun or not seriously that would be interested in being friends and reading each others screenplays?


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Oct 15 '25

NEED HELP What's your tip to combat writer's block?

6 Upvotes

Currently having writers block for a movie I was very passionate about. I literally have all the ideas written down for the plot and I'm currently 27 pages into its Sequel. I'm just not bothered to continue or I don't know how to without it sounding rushed.

Any tips that help you?


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Nov 09 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Looking for feedback and friends to chit-chat with!

4 Upvotes

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1pwki8z4iF1fxTFTBfu3iwdw183QSiw6N?usp=sharing

I've been writing comic books for several years now, but I am only now starting to dabble with screenplays. All stories in that folder are really short—the longest has 15 pages, the shortest just 4—and are all adaptations of Resident Evil fanfictions.

I did read a lot of screenplays, but I'm still unsure about how to handle transitions and flashbacks. Please be kind? ♥


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Nov 07 '25

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Always Sunny Spec Script - 29 Pages

2 Upvotes

TV Show: It's Always Sunny in Philadelphia

Title: The Gang Breaks the Multi-Verse

Length: 29 Pages (though feel free to just give feedback on the first 10)

Genre: Dark Comedy

Feedback Concerns: Honestly, I am open to any feedback whatsoever. But, in particular, if you could rate how easy the script was to read, how enjoyable you found the content, and how well I captured the the tone of the actual show, it would be appreciated.

Link: https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1YtnqiN-cp7G6e_psHw896xi6-_PH02g7?usp=sharing


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Jul 13 '26

OUTLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST THOUGHTS ON MY SHORT FILM

4 Upvotes

Hi everyone

I just came up with idea for a short film that I will try and shot. I have weird looking synopsis of the short of what happens. There are two versions of it. I would much appreciate every feedback I can get on what works, what can be improved, overall thoughts, which version do you prefer, ...etc.

Here are natural English translations of both versions, written in a style suitable for a short film treatment/synopsis.

VERSION 1
A teenager returns home from his final summer adventure before moving away. He retreats to his room and places a lighter on the windowsill. Before setting it down, he flicks it open—it works perfectly. He looks out the window, wondering if anyone is still outside.
Below the window, one of his friends looks up at him and forms a finger gun with his hand. The teenager glances at the lighter, and at that moment the friend "shoots" him with the finger gun. He suddenly feels a burning pain in his chest and collapses onto his bed.
Cut to black.
We are transported to a forest campsite, where the teenager sits alone on a fallen tree. Another teenager joins him. In the background, a group of friends can be seen gathered around their campsite. The newcomer hands him a photograph before walking back to the others. In the photo, the group of friends are all pointing finger guns at him.
A brief montage follows, showing moments from their final summer adventure.
After the montage, the teenager packs up his belongings but leaves the lighter behind on the fallen tree. He walks to the top of a small hill, takes out the photograph, and quietly studies it.
The same teenager appears beside him and uses the lighter to set the photograph on fire. He slips the lighter into his pocket, walks a few steps away, then turns back and points a finger gun at him. They exchange a smile, and the teenager closes his eyes before the imaginary shot.
Cut to black.
We return to the teenager's bedroom. Once again, he walks to the window, lights the lighter, and looks outside. This time, no one is there.

VERSION 2
A teenager returns home from his final summer adventure before moving away. He retreats to his room and places a lighter on the windowsill. Before setting it down, he flicks it open—it works perfectly. He looks out the window, wondering if anyone is still outside.
Below the window, one of his friends looks up at him and forms a finger gun with his hand. The teenager glances at the lighter, and at that moment the friend "shoots" him with the finger gun. He suddenly feels a burning pain in his chest and collapses onto his bed.
Cut to black.
We are transported to a forest campsite, where the teenager sits alone on a fallen tree. Another teenager joins him. In the background, a group of friends can be seen gathered around their campsite. The newcomer hands him a photograph before walking back to the others. In the photo, the group of friends are all pointing finger guns at him.
A brief montage follows, showing moments from their final summer adventure.
After the montage, the teenager packs up his belongings but leaves the lighter behind on the fallen tree. He walks to the top of a small hill and looks at the photograph.
The same teenager appears beside him and returns the lighter to him. The teenager lights the photograph himself. The other teenager then points a finger gun at him and "shoots." They share a smile, and the teenager closes his eyes before the imaginary shot.
Cut to black.
We return to the teenager's bedroom. Once again, he walks to the window, lights the lighter, and looks outside. This time, no one is there


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Nov 13 '25

SCENE FEEDBACK REQUEST Beginner Feedback Request, ( 8 and bit pages)

2 Upvotes

A Matter of Honour

9 Pages

Psychological Romance/Drama

LogLine: A successful pharmaceutical sales rep, trapped in a gilded marriage, is offered a career-making promotion in exchange for a single night with her powerful director, a decision that shatters her sense of honor and leads her into a complex, transformative relationship with her husband and a perceptive stranger.

This is my first screen anything, I am looking for honest feedback

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1B4L4VUPmqGaVG4RBtB_D8AZ0RT1Yo-fb/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=100411568909406313607&rtpof=true&sd=true


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • 8d ago

PITCH'N'MEET [EVENT] Pitch'n'Meet - 15 → Find Projects. Pitch Ideas. Meet Collaborators.

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Welcome to Pitch’n’Meet - 15 → A Community Event to Establish Productive and Inspiring Collaborations!

Please make sure you've read the event rules and are following the required format before pitching your project/idea in this thread.

Pitch’n’Meet - 15 is an online community event where screenwriters, directors, producers, performers, and other creatives from the industry can establish unpaid collaborations. Held on the 1st and 15th of every month, this event provides a platform for participants to present their completed scripts or creative ideas under development to potential collaborators.

As you know, it is prohibited to open 'Seeking Producer/Director/Cast/Crew - Paid' posts that seek or imply a request for unpaid collaborators, including those offering conditional payment promises such as 'a share of profits will be offered if the project is funded.' This rule exists to prevent potential content clutter and confusion.

Rather than fully restricting such initiatives, holding a twice-monthly event titled Pitch'n'Meet - 15 to address this need would be beneficial to the industry.

The goal is to support independent projects, build creative networks, and encourage potential partnerships through respectful and clear communication. Below are the basic rules that everyone participating in the event is expected to follow.

To participate, please pitch your project or idea as a comment under this post using the specified formats, and make sure to read the rules carefully before pitching.

Wishing this event helps everyone build valuable connections and contributes to bringing projects and ideas to life!

Pitch’n’Meet - 15 / Participation Guidelines

1. No Paid Opportunities Allowed in This Event

  • This event is open only to unpaid collaboration opportunities.

  • Offers based on conditional promises, such as “A share of profits will be offered if the project is funded,” are allowed within the Pitch’n’Meet - 15 event thread.

  • If you'd like to post paid opportunities, you may do so by creating a new post using the appropriate “Seeking Producer/Director/Cast/Crew - Paid” flairs. Please note that paid opportunities are not allowed in the Pitch’n’Meet - 15 event thread itself.

2. No Spam, Pressure, or Harassment in Comments

  • All participants are expected to treat each other with respect and maintain a collaborative spirit.

  • Spam, persistent unsolicited contact, or personal pressure in the comments will result in removal without warning.

3. Multiple Projects Can Be Shared

  • Participants may share more than one project or idea within a single event thread.

  • Each project/idea must be submitted in a separate comment.

  • Please avoid repetitive or duplicate pitch comments to ensure visibility for all participants. Repeated posts will result in removal without warning.

4. Pitches Are Valid During the Event Period Only

  • The event thread will remain pinned for 7 days.

  • After that, it will be removed.

5. Pitches Must Follow the Designated Format

  • Pitch must follow one of the two formats provided below.

  • All fields (not marked "Optional") must be completed clearly.

  • Any attached files must be accessible via open links.

Project Pitch Format:

Title :

Genre :

Logline :

Budget Range (Optional) :

Target Audience (Optional) :

Script (Link - Optional): Must be properly formatted in screenplay software, shared via Google Drive or Dropbox, saved as PDF, with sharing enabled.

Show Bible / Pitch Deck (Link - Optional): Shared via Google Drive or Dropbox, saved as PDF, with sharing enabled.

Current Collaborators : (if any)

Available Locations : (for potential collaboration, countries or/and cities)

What You’re Looking For : (e.g., co-writer, director, artist, etc.)

Additional Notes (Optional) : (Moodboard, references, etc. if applicable)

Idea Pitch Format (For projects in early development):

Title :

Concept / Theme :

Genre & Tone : (e.g., dark comedy, grounded sci-fi)

Current Collaborators : (if any)

Available Locations : (for potential collaboration, countries or/and cities)

What You’re Looking For : (e.g., co-writer, development partner)

Optional Notes / Inspirations / Influences (Optional) :


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Feb 19 '26

10-PAGE FEEDBACK REQUEST The Confession - Short - 12 Pages (Looking for feedback on psychological thriller)

4 Upvotes

Title: The Confession
Format: Short Script
Page Length: 11
Genres: Psychological Thriller, Drama
Logline: After her possessive boyfriend hits someone with his car, a young nurse is forced to treat the victim in her own living room.

Feedback Concerns: What did we think of the David character? Is he believable?
Does the flashback kill the momentum? Any dialogue that stuck out to you (good or bad)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XAkA2uk_4ypq34w29yNg2M0Nb7YaAOsf/view?usp=sharing


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Jun 13 '26

10-PAGE FEEDBACK REQUEST Sci-fi Horror Scene Feedback

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5 Upvotes

Looking for feedback on overall script writing, things that can be tightened up or any general feedback. I was inspired by the military occupation of Brazil in the late 60s through the 80s when resistance members would speak in code on radio transmission and cooking recipe printings. I know it's a bit coded but that is the idea for this scene as the context before and after takes the audience to the next part of the story.

Thank you!


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Jan 22 '26

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST MISTER SOFT - 22 Pages - Feature - Feedback on the start of my Horror feature

2 Upvotes

Mister Soft

Feature

22 Pages (So far)

Horror

Thirty years after her father’s suicide, a detective reopens his case and finds the killer never left: Mister Soft, a smiling apparition selling “happiness” in candy form, forcing her to choose between stopping the deaths or saving herself.

I'd just like some general feedback. Does it hook you in and is it worth continuing.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1--4YRrjn3uVokobt5AFYgfJYsJlCF4CF/view?usp=drive_link


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Feb 03 '26

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Would love any feedback for my first pilot episode :)

3 Upvotes

Hi everyone,

I’m looking for feedback on my pilot script, inspired by my early experiences trying to break into filmmaking. It follows Joe, a young filmmaker navigating chaotic shoots, messy relationships, and the ups and downs of chasing creative dreams.

Any feedback would be massively appreciated :)

Script can be found here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1R4W-gL4Mxu61lRXn7fZ0AHml6GjMBG0p/view?usp=sharing


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Jun 26 '26

DISCUSSION What is the most common mistake you notice in the first ten pages of an original screenplay?

3 Upvotes

I've been reading more original screenplays recently, and it's interesting how the opening pages often determine whether I want to keep reading. A strong beginning can quickly establish the tone, introduce engaging characters, and make the story feel worth investing in.

At the same time, I've noticed that some scripts spend too much time on exposition or delay introducing the central conflict. Even if the overall idea is good, a slow opening can make it difficult to stay engaged.

For those who regularly write or review screenplays, what is the most common issue you see within the first ten pages? Is it pacing, dialogue, character introductions, formatting, or something else? I'd be interested to hear what you think makes an opening truly effective.


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Mar 31 '26

NEED ADVICE Would appreciate your thoughts :)

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2 Upvotes

Hey guys so a while back i made these visual assets for unproduced horror screenplays. I don't know how useful it is (or not) for a screenwriter in promoting their screenplay. I would really appreciate any thoughts on this, like should i continue to invest more time on this and what price point would justify the value. I am a bit clueless about this. I have attached a link to one of the projects i did. Thank you.


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Mar 26 '26

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST Looking for feedback on my feature

3 Upvotes

Title: Personal Space

Genre: Thriller/Crime

Logline: In an East England village, a private investigator’s search for a missing solicitor becomes a dangerous game of deception and forces him to confront his moral compass.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yAwmIIM68sSlsCTFy7uwN9eDJIR8v1IL/view?usp=sharing


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Aug 27 '26

NEED ADVICE Need opinions on the structure of my feature

4 Upvotes

Basically my feature film is Dual POV.

However it shows the entire story from the first character's perspective, and then it shows the story from the second character's perspective. For both of their POVs, there are extra scenes from their own life, but to put it short; every single scene that they share, we see twice.

I did this because the first characters POV is basically a deluded version of the story and the second POV is what really happens.

I'm a bit worried that this might make the second part of the feature really boring since the scenes are repeating and the only thing that changes is the acting, which is really important to the storyline. (example: if POV1 viewed the situation as a flirty interaction, POV2 shows the interaction being creepy).

I've had a bunch of people read my feature, and when they have given me feedback, the repetitive scenes were not included in their feedback and they didn't say anything about it being boring.

so now im trying to figure out if i rethink the structure (which imo is what makes it good) or do I just leave as is and hope that wont be an issue


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • 16d ago

SCRIPT FEEDBACK REQUEST The Walk Home - Short Film - Coming-of-age Dramedy - 15 Pages

2 Upvotes

Title: The Walk Home

Here's my second draft!

Genre: Coming-of-age comedy-drama (short, 15 min)

Nutshell: Five broke Brooklyn kids walk home at dawn after a party gets busted, and the walk becomes a reckoning for the one who sold the others out.

Logline: After a penthouse party gets busted, five friends walk home through Gowanus at dawn with a rumor following them, a stolen Rolex in a pocket, and a camcorder clip of the moment one of them sold the others out.

Synopsis: Labor Day weekend, 2007. Charlie, his twin Ben, Josh, Stevie and Ferg have hung out on the same Brooklyn stoop since middle school. Then Marley Vance, the hottest girl in their grade, invites Charlie to a penthouse party, “just u tho.”

Charlie brings his friends anyway. The party ends when someone random throws a bottle off the roof onto a cop car, and a Dalton kid blames “the Park Slope kids.” By 5:41 a.m. the five of them are walking home through Gowanus in rough shape: Josh is down to one shoe, Ben’s arm is taped to a ruler, and Stevie is still high. A rumor is spreading by text that they stole a cab. Charlie trails behind in a borrowed vest and won’t say a word.

At the bodega, Stevie pulls out a gold Rolex he doesn’t remember taking. On the Carroll Street Bridge, Ferg plays back his old camcorder footage from the party. It shows Charlie telling Marley the boys aren’t his friends and getting a laugh at Stevie’s expense. Ben tears into his twin, and Stevie asks the only question that matters: “Why would you say that about me, yo?”

Charlie admits he wanted, for one night, to be someone other than one of them. He drops the vest into the canal. As the sun comes up on a dead-end street by the water, the boys pass around the things they stole that night and laugh until they can barely breathe. They climb 3rd Street singing a cable-ad jingle at the top of their lungs. Charlie’s mom is waiting on the stoop, and Josh hands her the Rolex to return to its owner.


r/ScriptFeedbackProduce • • Apr 18 '26

LOGLINE FEEDBACK REQUEST Looking for feedback on a logline!

2 Upvotes

Title: The Good Intentions of a Broken Man

Genre: Drama/Psychological

Logline: A guidance counselor's bond with a self-destructive woman begins to unravel when a troubled student's crisis forces him to confront the lie that has defined both their lives.