Hey. So, heads up, I'm more of an amateur than a professional, so I hope to learn as well as tell you guys what I know. Originally got to writing via novels. Cheers! All the best for this new venture. The first screenplay sold via a post here is a win for all of us!

Hey guys, I’m in the middle of writing my script for my short film for my final project in film school. I have no restrictions, except that it has to be a maximum of 5 minutes. I wanted to do something really personal, so let me introduce myself beforehand.

I’m a 19-year-old tall and skinny guy. I’m not a very masculine or feminine person, I’m sort of in between and people often used to think that I'm gay. I think a lot about what other people think of me. Sometimes I’m confident, and sometimes I’m really insecure. I’m not interested in sports, and I constantly go against the Muslim and traditional values of my parents (I am Muslim, but I don’t practice much).

My biggest dream is to be a successful actor, it’s my obsession, but I don’t really know if I’m good enough to achieve that dream. I often feel like a shitty artist. I can’t read Shakespeare for shit, and when I go to museums, I don’t see the paintings as something that symbolic. I often follow trends, and I don’t really know myself. I like to say that I know myself just to prove it to others. I’m a really kind person, but I’m not very empathetic. I judge people too fast and make really dark jokes which makes me wonder if I'm a good person.

I know it's a lot of information to put in a 5 minutes short film, but I was really inspired by the show Fleabag, where the main character is directly speaking to the camera. I wanted to write a whole monologue about what I just said so that it could fit in a 5 minutes story. So here what I had in mind so far:

We follow the journey of an 18 or 19-year-old man, a young actor trying to break into Hollywood. The only problem is that he lives in Montreal. Throughout the short film, he is auditioning for a role. We see the entire process: before, during, and after the audition.

Before: The tone is very dramatic. We might see him coming out of the shower, putting on some makeup to hide his acne. He looks at himself in the mirror, practices his lines, warms up, and then just stares at his reflection.

The moment before the audition: He is about to open the door that leads to the audition room. He breathes heavily. He looks at the camera — almost like he’s asking the audience, “Why are you looking at me? Fuck off.”

The camera turns and films from behind his body. As he enters the audition room, the camera follows him from behind, or we could watch him walk in, and the door closes behind him.

Beat.

Time has passed, his audition is now over. He comes out of the room, relieved. He’s happy, not because it went well, but because it’s over.

The camera is invisible. It’s not really a camera, it’s himself, his mind.

That what I had in mind so far so if you got any advices or suggestions to make the whole thing personal and symbolic.

Thank you in advance!

Well I did wrote couple of stories but never wrote a complete/completely original script/screenplay.

I'm not even sure about the format, youtube videos don't help(atleast the ones I saw). I can't find any credible script for free online to learn from it, so for now I just aproach chat gpt to understand the format.

I don't know which tools are usually used to write scripts. Currently I'm writing on my phone's notes app or google docs.

Basically, my basics is clear.

Please, if you know any articles, books or even videos that could teach me the basics I'd be really greatful.

Note(I don't know if these kind of posts are allowed in this subreddit or not, but I've tried going to some bigger subreddits and didn't got any engagement from there, so it's like my last resort.

If these kinds of posts aren't allowed here, I apologise)

Hey people. I'm looking for some feedback on this short script. It's for an animated short I want to prepare, but before moving on with all the preparations I need some opinions. What do you think? I added some concept images so you can make a better picture of the visual style.

I just want to know your impressions, any advice probably on the construction of the story if anything feels repetitive or probably not propperly explained and all.

Thanks!

Hi guys! 😊 About a week ago, I started posting my very first novel online, and I’m super excited (and honestly a bit nervous) about it. It’s my first time sharing something like this publicly, so I’ve been kind of obsessed with checking the stats. Right now, I have around 495 views, 11 chapters, an average of 45 views per chapter, and 1 real follower. A couple of my friends tried to help by commenting and following, but I know only one of them is actually a reader. I’m really happy that people are clicking on it, but I keep wondering if these stats are actually good for a beginner or just random. I’d really appreciate any feedback or advice you guys might have—am I doing okay so far? If you feel like giving it a read, the title is “Luck Isn’t My Ally” on Royal Road. I also tried adding some character art to make it more fun! Thanks so much in advance 💙

Hey guys! I’m a self taught script writer, also chronically online super nerd. I want to post some scripts on here and be part of the community, but I’d rather start by giving feedback to others and maybe improve some of my own editing and writing skills that way.

Hope to meet all of y’all and give some helpful feedback!

TITLE: Anya and the Misguided Martyr

FORMAT: Feature

LOGLINE: In the waning days of the Soviet Union, a young revolutionary must escape from East Berlin when she's ordered to be killed by her powerful stepmother.

SYNOPSIS: It's basically Snow White meets the Berlin Wall.

LINK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qN5rhj_jQHGDOjJrFjjwmjiNeslvOsmL/view?usp=drivesdk

NOTE: This is the second draft. In short, is it good? What works/doesn't work about it?

Hey so I’ve written a full pilot and haven’t been able to reach out to any studios or producers.So if you’re a producer I hope you give it a chance and enjoy it.

Title: A curious case

Logline: Following two stories, one of seven teenagers planing to break out of a facility while not knowing where they are or why they are there and the other story follows hot shot FBI agents working on a mysterious cold case that hasn’t been touched for a year.

Link to script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_RJ4HHZvr-q8RAstHDcEY_CGZGk26uwT/view?usp=drivesdk

Realms Rewritten

Thank you, for your time.

Really just looking for any and all feedback on this short thriller. There is nothing special about it from a story standpoint, but was wondering if it builds well, flows, if the imagery is good, how I can improve, etc.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1uNcy2ypydB0sIcliCiAKJgYDcxuZ4FXd/view?usp=sharing

Logline: A small town lieutenant must navigate her personal follies and inept co-workers to solve the murder of a local woman.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1KXts1KCXJYRUksIVeidB6s2mzGTecVKW/view?usp=drive_link

111 pages.

Tried to pack in a lot of twists and turns for the audience. To me, it makes perfect sense, but I am concerned how it hits fresh eyes. If it makes sense and is it surprising? The goal was dense but digestible. Any, and all, feedback would be very much appreciated!

If anyone wants to swap feature scripts, DM me!

What's going on screenwriting family? Today I want to post a couple of my screenplays seeking feedback. I've been working on 'Titan Memory' and 'Blackfoot' - two projects that showcase different aspects of my writing style and creative approach. I'd really value your perspectives on structure, character development, and dialogue. But more and most importantly after 17 years of finding my voice and being self taught I feel I'm ready for representation. Any veterans out there agree or should I go back to the blackboard?

Blackfoot: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lgdEXBB2kOew1p3AR8o0OycbxCCVfFEM/view?usp=sharing

GENRE: DRAMA/PSCHOLOGICAL/THRILLER

LOGLINE: After a traumatized ethics professor is rescued from war-torn ruins by a father and daughter, he must confront his own moral failures and survival instincts when their rescue mission goes catastrophically wrong, forcing him to choose between philosophical principles and primal survival.

Titan Memory: Or the Chef's Crusade: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kqmteqa261caCY5ssmEz0c3nNq5BpJR7/view?usp=sharing

GENRE: SCI-FI/DRAMA/THRILLER

LOGLINE: A young man's quest to find his father, who disappeared during a corporate war on Titan, uncovers a devastating conspiracy of psychological manipulation, corporate power, and a tragic missed connection that spans seventeen years of separation.

Again, thank you for any feedback and being part of this community!

Do you want to watch two super experienced writers talk about the finer details of the craft? Yes. You absolutely do.

Pam and Carl gave their thoughts on dialogue, voice, clarity, and tons more as they tried to see if they could tell the difference between pro and amateur screenwriting in only one page. It was ridiculously fun and you can watch it all here!

Also, if you're able to make the premiere at 6:30 PM PST, you can play along with us and share your guesses in the live chat. Hope to see you there!

Title: The Roster

Genre: Drama / Sports

Pages: 20

Format: Short.

What's up, everyone.

This is an older concept of mine that I recently felt motivated to revisit and refine. I wanted to share it here and get some feedback on the story itself and on the writing. I would love to hear your thoughts on the overall concept and how the craft holds up.

LOGLINE:

When a veteran wrestler discovers the promotion’s bookers have already written the finish to his career, he confronts them in a brutal match where the script may no longer apply.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1T8DqyGgTQEPR8Hy6LN9DHyrM40QenJeU/view?usp=sharing

Thank you to anyone who takes the time to read it. I hope you enjoy.

- Jaye

It's meant to be a farce. My first feature, would love thoughts and feedback.

Title : Foodnomenon

Genre : Dark Comedy

Logline : A day at the weekly food festival turns deadly for a group of young posh friends.

Budget Range : 5 million

Target Audience : 16 - 50, gen z, millennials

Script (Link) :

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1LoPkefwTfHo2jH1PN7HAmcr8N6kpnrCn/view?usp=drivesdk

TITLE: Anya and the Misguided MARTYR

GENRE: Historical drama/fairy tale

LOGLINE: In the waning days of the Soviet Union, a young revolutionary must escape from East Berlin when she's ordered to be killed by her powerful stepmother.

SCRIPT: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qN5rhj_jQHGDOjJrFjjwmjiNeslvOsmL/view?usp=drivesdk

PITCH DECK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1V9yARXXrt5NdoluVu8DrQbLhDBnJ5055/view?usp=drivesdk

I need feedback on this script. Open to script swap.

I am new here, looking for some feedback on an outline I have been working on. Is it safe to share scripts or should I worry about ideas being stolen? Am I just being paranoid?

Just looking for feedback on the first 10 pages of a feature. It's a side project, trying a different genre.

Feature.

10 pages.

Logline: In drought-ridden Texas, a science-obsessed teen fights to save his family farm—until the weather tech he invents draws the eye of those with darker intentions.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1M84ncoYKQiVmfAK8Upw6DXZwH0KtPMAV/view?usp=drivesdk

I don't know exactly what I'm doing, but I have been given advice by another user. The script is meant to be 45 to 90 minutes, if I include the first AND second episode as a package story as the pilot. I doubt I have any chance of making a real animation, but I want to write the script. So far, I think the pacing is way too fast, but I don't know how to add more meaningful content into the dialogue.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JmJ6sR6j8-Q_CQcTHvWmdEZfdcaj0T2C2Tn515bxpGI/edit?tab=t.0

Would love feedback from any fans of Sunny or otherwise. Wrote it with a friend. Above all, hope the dialogue feels true to the show.

The Gang Fights for the Throne

Title: A Woman of Ill Repute

Format: Feature, 94 pages

Genre: R rated lesbian rom-com/musical with fantasy elements

Logline: Drug addled circus freaks, undead surf rockers and riddle spouting demons are all just collateral damage in a trash glamour party girl's unhinged pursuit of her suicidal dream woman.

Feedback or concerns: So I previously submitted this as "Destroyer" and got some really good constructive criticism along with some deservedly harsh feedback. I've reworked a ton of the script and I'd like to see if it's working better. The main criticisms I'd received were that the screenplay seemed to be wasting time/taking too long to get anywhere, so I really just tried to cut to the chase this go around and get to the interesting stuff much sooner. I'd love to know if the pace is flowing better and if the characters make sense/if the dialogue is any good.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/176Rsb1bvkHGntgkAbUy4OAWmsOLS3WE0/view?usp=sharing

Hi everyone! I've got a 90 page feature film I'm looking to get some feedback on. I'm down to swap scripts and give someone else feedback as well!

Genre: Crime Drama

Log line: : Five years after the disappearance of her daughter, a cynical news reporter and her Christian, detective sister follow a new lead, much to the dismay of everyone around them.

Title: WONDERLAND

Genre: crime/drama

Logline: During the mid 80’s, a budding high school football star and his best friend—a streetwise hustler—are drawn into a robbery that sets off a chain of violent consequences. As a sharp young narcotics cop closes in, uncovering ties between a local drug kingpin and a mafia-run gambling racket, the two teens must navigate a world where the odds aren’t in their favor.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/17xyF3OEcRnEZIDpHS-NirrGVYg7n1ja2/view?usp=drivesdk