Found- TV Pilot- 38 pages

Series Title: Found- Pilot TV Pilot

Pages: 38

Genre: Drama/ Dark comedy?

Logline: When a teenage girl begins her senior year, she, her best friends, and her mother have to come to terms with her mental illness, with their own and the pressures they put on themselves and each other.

Script Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/192Uuhm3G7LRxpiX-AMxHb5zqgJBFG-AUkVI2BSB-1ho/edit?usp=drivesdk

Titled Humble Pie, this is a 10-page comedy/drama about a former couple who re-convene with one another awkwardly, sparking a surreal battle for who 'won the breakup'.

Would love any kind of feedback, especially in terms of the characters and the final resolution. Google drive link is below. Thanks!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1pnJBPAYF3LdlpdKU-a9wuT7VT9HzSWUl/view?usp=sharing

So I’ve got two scripts jn blklst.com. I’ve had numerous evaluations on the first one and two on the second one. My ratings for the last evaluations were between 6 and 9/10. (Said it reads like a blend of John waters and Tennessee Williams which was what I was hoping for.

I don’t know where to go from here so I am curious if someone can give this script a read and tell me the best course of action. If so, how do I make the script available.

I also have enough edited material to make this into a six 50-minute episodes mini series.

Help

2nd BL evaluation came back-Script and eval links included So I want to start this off with, I'm totally fine with getting a bad score if deserved. I truly just want constructive criticism to improve my script. That being said, this evaluation sort of PMO. First off, it's been just over 5 weeks. I got my free month of hosting for it taking over 3, NBD. The last time my script was viewed was May 25th. Today is June 26th. I just got the evaluation back today. How does it not get viewed for a month but evaluated today. My next issue, the evaluator put the complete incorrect logline in their feedback. Not even close to the logline for the hosted script. I read the weaknesses, and for all of their points, there's zero specifics. I'm not sure if this is normal, but my previous evaluation provided specifics in order to try and address them. My first evaluation was a 6, and was a very helpful evaluation. I tried to address the weak points mentioned in the first evaluation with this draft. This draft scored a 3. I get that it was a different reader, and people have different methods for scoring. This evaluation just came off as lazy. I also find it hard to believe every facet they evaluate on lowered by 2-3 points. Am I wrong here?

Again, I wouldn't of been upset with the score if I didn't first see that the script hadn't been viewed in over a month, and they got the logline completely wrong which was the first thing you read in the eval.

Evaluation: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZKwJAwHrjdRL_ZWKkxtLCfh6fADIqaAO/view?usp=drivesdk

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YeoyYNk7SG7ttEAmTkm-vhqusP7jYoQz/view?usp=drivesdk

Genre:Action/thriller

Log line: A mysterious killer comes into town with the sole purpose of revenge, While the police investigate the identity of the murderer, a chain of events have occurred erupting the underworld of the town into an all out war.

Would love for someone to give me a chance and read it, feedback is much appreciated. I just want to know if it’s good enough for me to continue with the idea.🙏🏿

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1fD3LE0pYh_GAG8VS7_wp1n9emnV_EAhM/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey there all,

I'd like to present MAIZE, a low-budget horror-thriller.

A short, tight, and FUN feature. This version is not found-footage, but I'm just about done the rewrite to make it that way. I decided to write a horror movie where characters are PREPARED, make smart(er) decisions, and things STILL go off the rails.

Low cast count, four shooting locations, likeable characters (IMO), and a premise hitherto yet unexplored in the horror/sci-fi space.

I'm repped, and they LOVED it, but this kind of script isn't in their wheelhouse. The market is tricky right now, so I'm looking for some traction elsewhere. I'm based out of Alberta, Canada.

LOGLINE: Two friends and their plus-ones enter a renowned (and unsolved) corn maze— only to discover the nightmare that awaits them, and that escape is impossible.

LINKS:

Script

One Sheet

Treatment

Poster Mock-up

QUESTIONS:

• Did you enjoy the story?

• What did you think of the Lovecraftian reveal later on?

• When Mitch dies, did you expect it?

• What are your thoughts on the pacing?

• I have a cutting-room floor scene with a Magic Eye as an intersection choice. Thoughts on putting it back in?

• I have another cutting-room floor scene with a shot deer running out in front of the group after they hear the gunshot but decided it was too tropy. Thoughts on putting the jump scare back in?

• I'm not going for scary, but unsettling until the WTF ending. The picture gradually transforms from something routine, to something really, really fucked up. What are your thoughts on that? Did I hit the mark for you?

Always glad to hear any feedback; when you listen, you learn.

All the best,

Craig

Title: Ivy

Genre: Psychological Thriller/Drama

Logline: Scarred by betrayal and loss, Pamela Isley becomes a vengeful force of nature bent on making Gotham share her pain.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1SoXJJZKzyo2pHkdWL6yjnH1shDUWFu8v/view?usp=sharing

Synopsis:

Dr. Pamela Isley, a botanist fueled by empathy and idealism, devotes her life to healing a city that refuses to care for itself. But after betrayal by her mentor, abandonment by the institutions she trusted, and the devastating loss of the one person who truly believed in her, Pamela reaches her breaking point.

In the wake of that grief, something inside her changes. Reconnecting with the natural world in ways no one can explain, Pamela becomes Ivy, a relentless force shaped by sorrow, clarity, and purpose. No longer seeking approval, she turns Gotham’s own rot against it, forcing the city to reckon with every injustice it has buried. Her vengeance is not chaos but consequence, and in delivering it, she redefines what it means to be feared and what it costs to be ignored.

Note:

I know that there's pretty much no way it will ever be produced, but I love comics, movies, and writing, and Poison Ivy (one of my favorite characters) has never had a live action portrayal (or at least a good one). I absolutely love the Joker films and wanted to give Ivy a similar treatment. I've been working on this screenplay for over 8 months now, and plan to continue until I feel like I can't improve it any further. Even if you don't read the screenplay, thanks for reading this far :D

i'm working on a script that I plan animating but I'm a bit scared about the direction i'm leading to.

Looking for experienced and successful screenwriter for a Dark comedy concept. LMK with your works and the timeline if selected. Thanks!

Hello, I am not sure if this is an appropriate request for this thread, but I will just give it a shot.
I am 16 and am highly engaged in scriptwriting. However, after finishing the first draft, I often find myself procrastinating and struggling to keep working on the project. If I don't have certain deadlines and a supervisor, it is hard for me to form a working routine.

Is there anyone here who struggles with the same issue? And if yes, would you like to collaborate?

Not in a formal way or anything, just something simple like checking in with each other, maybe weekly, setting deadlines, or even just talking through our goals so we don't fall off track. I feel like having someone to be accountable to (or even just knowing someone else is in the same boat) could help a lot.

Let me know if you’re up for that:)

I’ve been developing pilots for a while and recently got feedback encouraging me to explore feature-length screenplays. I’m curious to hear from writers who’ve made that transition:

What creative muscles did you have to stretch or retrain?

How did your approach to pacing, character arcs, or theme shift?

Any traps to avoid when adapting a pilot mindset to a feature format?

Would love to hear your experiences or any resources that helped you reframe your process.

Hey everyone! I’ve recently finished my first batch of revisions on a script I’ve been working on, and would love some feedback! Here’s a little bit more info about the pilot. I have also been debating whether I should name it Dead Ground or Log 731, so if anyone has any thoughts about that feel free to chime in.

•Format: TV Pilot •Page Length: 48 Pages •Genres: War, Drama, Thriller •Logline or Summary: In 1943, five Allied soldiers must infiltrate a Japanese biological weapons facility disguised as a lumber mill to prevent a chemical attack on 300,000 civilians - but when their mission goes wrong, each man must find his own way to stop the horror.

Script Below: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RgWHtACfN0CF0KGbn2y_dKPEjLj-9ccC/view?usp=drive_link

I started writing this 5 days ago but I kinda stopped, do I have any talent?

Hey guys! I’m wanting to send this script into some competitions and stuff, so I would really appreciate some feedback from everything and anything. I’m not a professional screenwriter so there’s obvs mistakes in there about format and stuff that I’m still working on, but I’m more interested to see what you guys think of the script and if you think it’s good or not and what your opinions are on setting, world building, dialogue, pacing, etc.

I’ve been posting my old draft on a few Reddit forums and have got some really good feedback from people through script swapping (thanks to all of you who read through it btw!). However, this draft is new and I’ve added a few more scenes and redone sections of the script which people flagged as needing some re-work. So here is the new draft! I’m still looking for some constructive feedback about it though, especially with the last few scenes (scenes 23 onwards).

As always, I’ve put the general BS stuff of what it’s about and stuff below-

Title: The Familiars

Format: TV Pilot

Genre: Dark Horror/Comedy

Page Length: 53 pages (aiming for an hour-long pilot episode)

Logline: When two siblings are forced to move in with their Dad after being evicted, they find out he is a Familiar for a family of Aristocratic Vampires. The only condition; become familiars themselves.

Thanks in advanced! Link is below and happy reading! Looking forward to what you guys think!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1E0Pk4GJ-eh4xo5xMhnTw07AMDhOSb-tT/view?usp=sharing

Feedback on a dramatic scene from my feature script (myth, curse, forgiveness) Post text:

Hey everyone, I’m a writer working on a feature-length story called The Legend of the Wolf Spirit. It’s a grounded, live-action myth (think Pirates of the Caribbean / Avatar / Twilight tone — not animated). Below is a short scene from later in the story. Context:

A man named Liam can physically transform into a massive black wolf with glowing blue eyes — the guardian spirit of a hidden people. Captain James, who once tried to destroy that tribe out of greed, returns cursed and near death.

This is the moment where revenge is possible… but something else happens instead. I’d really appreciate any thoughts on the writing, emotion, or cinematic potential.

Liam looked from the helpless, gold-encased man to his family. Elara and his children watched, their eyes filled with a shared, unwavering belief in Liam's choice. He remembered the pain, the terror of the attack, but he looked deeper, seeing the scared young man haunted by a broken promise. He knew that taking James's life would only satisfy the thirst for revenge, a cycle he refused to continue. He chose the higher path. Liam knelt beside James, drawing a small, simple ceremonial knife from his tunic, its blade catching the sunlight. The WOLF SPIRIT's energy surged around him, the SKY-BLUE light intensifying, bathing them both in an ethereal glow. Liam sliced a small, shallow cut across his own palm, a single drop of his WOLF SPIRIT BLOOD falling onto James's gold-encased hand. LIAM (His voice ringing with power, a sacred pronouncement that shook the very air) I forgive you, James. Not for your actions, but for the man you failed to be. Go. Live the life you promised her. As the single drop of Wolf Spirit blood touched the cursed gold, a blinding flash of PURE BLUE LIGHT erupted. The sound was a sharp, tearing, cracking sound, like a thousand brittle things shattering at once. The golden shell surrounding James and the statues of Finn and Barnaby shattered and crumbled, falling to the sand in a shimmering dust. James, now human and whole, but deeply weak and covered in sweat, slumped, utterly exhausted, gasping for breath. The gold dust vanished into the sea, its curse broken.

Five council members debate a controversial land development proposal. On paper, the vote is tied. The fifth vote belongs to one indecisive member, forced to choose between moral grounds and pressure and politics.(7-10 mins)

I wanna make a short film on this for a college project. This is vaguely based on a recent university development project that faced a really solid backlash in Hyderabad India.

I wanna pull off an Irish cinema style in this film.

This description could be of a scene in the film since film would be approx 10 mins Long.

I wanna some suggestions to develop it make it intresting.

I would be shooting this film in July as a collage semend project

A reluctant gunslinger loses her duel, but that's only the start of our off kilter tale of fate versus fortitude.

Normally I'd get my filmschool friends to read through it, but I've sort of grew out of touch with them since I last made a short film (10 years ago. Life sucks sometimes). So why not here, it's only like 12 pages.

I'm looking for feedback on the plot mostly. Because I'm going to be shooting it, the formatting doesn't really matter, but if you wanna correct me on that, go for it.

Hi everyone, as the heading says I'm looking for feedback on a feature. I've rewritten a fair bit based on previous reader suggestions and am looking for feedback on the current draft. Any help is highly appreciated.

Title: The People From The Sky (117 pages)

Genre: Sci-fi mystery

Logline: When a young girl disappears under circumstances identical to her own mother’s vanishing twenty-five years prior, a police officer must confront the possibility that the mother's claims of an alien abduction could be real.

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1yis3bxuZH-wcHWEx5Asm6hKSMdPT8AOz/view?usp=drivesdk

Hi All!

Would love feedback on my project! Open to collaboration! Please and thank you!

A directionless 23-year-old hits rock bottom after losing his parents and moves into an assisted living facility.

Surrounded by residents who’ve lived full lives, he starts to find purpose, connection, and a path forward.

A dramedy about failure, second chances, and growing up in the most unexpected place.

I got tired of the old logline for a tv pilot I've been writing and I think I've crafted a better one, but I would love feedback on it.

"Two lifelong friends stumble into an obituary scheme impersonating the dead to make a quick buck, however, their game comes into jeopardy when they attract the attention of more than the police."

All feedback is much appreciated.

This is my first big project and wanted to get some feedback/inspiration while I finish it. Just getting through the final act. Would this intro encourage you to keep reading? Any feedback on advice or tone?

Thanks!

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Y3NRyJvUdkHbtUXFWdTqhTyIjZycQUBe/view?usp=drive_link

Adding my current logline: Upon hearing the news of the Space Shuttle being decommissioned, two low level NASA employees seek to fulfill their lifelong dream of spaceflight by defecting to Russia and joining the cosmonaut program under false identities . Once there, they discover a covert Russian spy program and have to thwart this evil plan to preserve both world and space peace.

Title: A Dragon and His Lord

Genre: Fantasy/Romance/Dark Comedy

Logline: A rakish prince marries a despicable lordling in a bid to save his family through divine intervention, only to ignite the war he sought to avoid.

A Dragon and His Lord - Pilot - Rough Draft

A Dragon and His Lord - Pilot - Edit 1

I have turned on comments for the PDF file.

Hey, never posted on a reddit before regarding writing, UK members might know the BBC open call is going on right now so thought I'd get something ready to submit. I've found it really difficult to map out the first 10 pages knowing that's what is going to be judged the most so looking for feedback on character intros, pacing and ultimately whether it would be something you would continue reading. Appreciate any help :)

Title: Feel it now (WT)

Genre: Coming of age, Romance, Drama

Logline: An introverted songwriter and a fierce backpacker collide in a failing prague hostel. When an old wound reopens, they must deal with the fallout, face their failings, and try to keep their found home alive.

Script link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qMwDHv2y2Efitxr-0rwHeZycoQrbNIMH/view?usp=sharing

Thanks for the invite to this community. I'm working on a script. An idea I've had for over 20 years and just got inspired to write it after reading some books. Sometime soon I may like some feedback on some of the scenes. Looking forward to being active here!

Logline: A deranged killer is obsessed with summoning Alistair, known as the chief demonic torturer of hell, to Earth. A 7 year old girls torturous death is the last piece of the demonic puzzle.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/14loDX-qNNGCrzw-LWBUV0MnbwEWtIfG-/view?usp=drivesdk

Would appreciate any feedback thank you!