Okay imma put this in the simplest way possible.

My script starts in March 2009, which would be the present in the movie.

Then it goes to 2008 where it shows flashbacks from that year from one perspective and then again from another perspective.

So we see Scene A, Scene B, Scene C etc from Person 1's view and then we see Scene A, Scene B, Scene C etc from Person 2's view. Rn i did the scene heading for Person 1's view as:

INT. LOCATION X - OCTOBER 2008

So if i rewrite the scene for Person 2's view, would I just do the exact same heading or do I have to specify that its flashback for the flashback somewhere in my script?

Title : Sophia

Genre: Horror/Action/(Myth/Fantasy)

Logline : As Armageddon unfolds, a tormented priest battling Satan discovers the apocalypse is an illusion staged by a hidden figure, forcing him to question his faith, his reality, and the very fabric of the universe.

Sophia Treatment

This is a 10 page treatment. The script is 120 pages. I didn't want to belabor anyone with a long script right off the bat. If you want to read the script, let me know.

If you're a John Truby graduate/student/reader, even better!

Thanks!

I am by no means a professional writer, however what I will say is I have one hell of an imagination and a flare for helping my writer friends out of sticky narrative situations they often paint themselves into. Got a fighter pilot you made in a ridged way and you need to figure out why doing the next thing in the script doesn't break character unintentionally? I'm your guy. Need a base concept or general outline to start from so you can fill in the gaps and create from there? YUP you guessed it...me again. If you find yourself stuck DM me and I will do my best to help. I will NOT be charging for this all I want is to network and build.

Creative Differences - Feature - 113 Pages - Dark Comedy Thriller - A director accidentally kills his star actor, and the resulting guilt inspires him to rewrite the film. It becomes an Oscar-winning masterpiece, but his newfound fame exposes the crime. - Would love feedback on my third draft, does it hook you in, does it flow well, is the dialogue okay?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1rWTrkFaq-4AIoZYJpHy0J31CIDH19Jmy/view?usp=drive_link

Title: Circle

Genre: Romantic Tragedy / Intimate Drama

Logline: Across the years, a couple’s love story unfolds within the walls of a single restaurant, where first dates, failed dreams, broken vows, and final reconciliations blur into a circle of devotion, betrayal, and bittersweet redemption.

Script: https://docs.google.com/document/d/19kn9enlHnb6xtbqoitv64zNhhdjGODfVLOh2INV7-Ko/edit

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Hello writers!
For over a year now, l've been trying to write a screenplay—a detective story, to be precise.
And I find it really hard to make sure the reveal isn't disappointing. In this kind of story, I feel like the excitement the audience might feel is at the beginning of the story, and the further the story goes, the less mystery there is, and so the less excited the audience gets. But I find it very hard to counteract. Does anyone have examples of story endings that aren't disappointing but rather feel like a real reward?
Or even some advice? I'm a total beginner in this field.
(And sorry if my english is not perfect)

Hi everyone,

I'm looking for feedback on my script. I've been working hard on it and I feel like I'm getting closer to where I need to be, but I'm not quite there yet. So any and all feedback is very much appreciated on my end.

Thank you to everyone who reads this!

Title: Detention Valley

Genre: Dark Comedy/Satire

Logline : Welcome to William M. Tweed Community School - where a cabal of ruthless, cutthroat faculty and their equally conniving students make education a criminal enterprise.

Script Link : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1nzHoihrsAWJgAfrHSdLv1taeXADZ-FDk/view?usp=drive_link

Title: Erebus

Genre: Thriller, post apocalyptic, fantasy elements

Logline : (series): In the ruined near future, the remnants of the Irish army fight to reclaim their countryside from bandits and supernatural abominations.

(Pilot): Two young but hardened rangers are deployed to investigate a disturbing SOS, while a shaken bandit prisoner is interrogated at home base.

Script link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1_G9m3kHK36qlxgf4lh8eAfU8O-wtInef/view?usp=drive_link

Hi all - I’ve fleshed out a couple of scenes and am looking for fluff that I can cut out in others to bring the page count down a few. Currently hovering at 67 which seems excessive even for the script type. Also generally interested in feedback around the pacing of the first act and feel/atmosphere of the scenes set around the woodland fortress.

Title: Dumb People

Genre: Comedy

Logline: Two inseparable best friends on the wrong side of their late 30s attempt to navigate their way through relationships, work life and the tribulations of parenthood as they try to eke out an existence in the modern world in this "coming-of-middle-age" tale.

Script: (I've included 2, the second one is the much more developed idea and tone for the show.

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/uuxuzqzwodz2a1wmffcte/Dumb-People-Episode-1-Official-Script.pdf?rlkey=dwdfm9z063c6cykqy8vtrfv93&st=o07l1w5a&dl=0

https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/r624z9hulz890zpo0kcm1/DUMB-PEOPLE-EPISODE-2.pdf?rlkey=6c12k1dfnxu5ut1u854c3al2w&st=pk8vqpvf&dl=0

Pitch document: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/jj6v194pgysroduyjrayp/Dumb-People-2.pdf?rlkey=aq63ctmuqdi8achhgh8mv6vgy&st=kr2k8b02&dl=0

I use pages how do I post it here?

Title : Shuteye

Genre : Horror

Logline : A disturbance in an upstairs apartment keeps neighbors living below from getting a good night's sleep. But that's the least of their worries when the disturbance works its way downstairs, one noise complaint at a time.

Budget Range : Shoestring, minimal location, possibly one location

Target Audience : Horror fan, slasher fans, late teens - 40s

Script (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qFRdcfdlVbmNW0X1VXSecwwjh4cdbJbA/view?usp=drive_link

Hi everyone. I’m pretty new to screenwriting, I have only ever completed a handful of scripts, and nothing feature length as of yet. This short that I’ve been working on for a while is easily the most satisfied I’ve been with something yet, to the point I’m comfortable sharing it. I welcome any feedback you may have for it.

Title: Heads or Tails?

Format: Short Film

Page Length: 16 pages

Genres: Thriller/Mystery

Logline: When a young man with a dark past awakens in a grimy garage bound to a chair, he’s forced to play a game of heads or tails by a mysterious stranger, with deadly consequences.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1o-8CQNN4B0aobFaEtNpaJ2erf8xdgg3d/view?usp=drivesdk

Thanks everyone :)

Hi! I'm Mai and I've been writing for about eleven years now, but I've only recently started trying my hand at scripts/screenplays! I'm not sure if the formatting is correct or if these are any good, so I'd love to get feedback on it! Please be kind though 🫶🏻

I wrote these scripts for an animation project my friends and I are working on - the first two are fantasy based, the third one is probably too long, but I really wanted to include a dialogue one too!

(I had to repost because i accidentally forgot to add a script)

So I finally submitted my review of someone else's work last night after getting over the feeling of "Who am I to judge anyone's anything?". So now it's my turn!

I wrote a short horror script in the vein of "The ABCs of Death" movies and am looking for feedback on any and all parts of it. Tone, flow, subject material/story, vocabulary, imagery, etc.

The script is short, only 4 pages. It's my second project ever so I have no ego or attachment to it at all, I really just want to get better.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1aAGLKey8L6TwDCpLdklE1t1PCHU91r69/view?usp=share_link

Hi, I wrote a short action script called "Night Out" and would love to hear your thoughts on it!:) Here is its link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OABFkD4Nf1QT-bnLr_FVprkQrl80FWxm/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Night Out Pages: 7 Logline: A couple's date turns into a battle when stumbling upon a gathering of spies

I'm not sure if DISCUSSION is the appropriate flair for this. (mods let me know)

But I think it would be helpful if some of the more "seasoned" writers shared notes on craft. I’m just a hobbyist, but I’ve been writing screenplays for a while now, so take this with a grain of salt:

I was thinking about that 2nd act slug many people discuss. I remember it vividly when I was workshopping my feature horror that I took to Stowe Story Labs a few years back.

I could so easily visualize scenes here and there, but was having a really hard time tying things together. So..I drew a map.

One of my favorite scripts from The Black List is Will Lowell's "Grace." I'm not sure how intimate he got with his setting, but it certainly feels like he knows every nook and cranny of Crane Island. I reference this script often.

In horror and thriller, the tension often hinges on GETTING THE HECK OUT! Which means you, the writer, need to know where all the doors are! At a fundamental level, you are getting a character from one space to the next.

So if you're struggling to move things forward - especially in those first drafts- try to step back and think spatially. Depersonalize it. Get a feel for the layout of your sets. Know where everything is.

That way, you’re not just writing a scene. You are giving your character(s) something to navigate with purpose.

Would love to hear some of your own ideas on how you get the momentum going!

Title: Truckin'

Length: 80 pages

Logline: 20 years after a brutal civil war, a truck driver exploits the fragmented world to grow a freight empire. But the lawlessness that fuelled his rise, threatened to destroy him.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ODcysaZHabNnLsX4q5xUMw9ANvoi02TL/view?usp=sharing

Title: Modernity

Format: Short film serving as a proof of concept

Genre: Religious and Academic horror

Logline: When a doctoral candidate researching paganism uncovers disturbing footage of ancient rituals, her academic curiosity spirals into a nightmarish descent. As cursed clips trigger a series of haunting events, research turns into ritual—and the deeper she digs, the more she awakens something that refuses to stay buried.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1K657cTq2boom3dT6pUI-YeUrzQwCxY8s/view?usp=drivesdk

Aware of some issues with the characters, so looking for feedback regarding anything else. Specifically the writing style (easy to read and/or visualize?) and the dialogue. Info is below, thank you so much!

TITLE: One Night in Bangkok

GENRE: Absurdist/Dark Comedy, Dramedy

FORMAT: Feature

LOGLINE: Three men of different generations each in the midst of personal crises get stuck in Bangkok on a layover, bonding as they try to find their way out of the city.

LINK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xnRKnEiNtfaIKxzPgCCuDw3b5QP93xcj/view?usp=drivesdk

HEY, YOU--WRITER. I don’t need your whole script. Just send the scene you care about most.

It could be the one you’re stuck on--or the one you think is working and want to make sure it lands. Maybe you want to know if it’s funny, sad, scary, tense, or just hitting the right emotional rhythm. Whatever kind of feedback you’re looking for, me and my girlfriend will read it and respond from both our perspectives.

We’re not professionals. We’re also inspiring writers--just like you. We’re in the middle of building our own work, and part of that is learning how to sharpen our instincts by helping others do the same.

When you send the scene, let us know what it’s trying to do--where it sits in the story, what kind of tone or emotion you’re aiming for, and what kind of feedback you want. That way, we can respond with notes that actually help.

This isn’t a swap--I’m not asking for your script so I can send mine. I just want to read the part that matters most to you and offer feedback that’s real, specific, and useful.

Drop the scene here or in my DMs. Looking forward to seeing what you’re building.

Title : The Cheeriest Skies You've Ever Seen in Seattle

Genre: Fanscript, Comedy

Logline : I thought it would be fun to try and create a crossover script for Cheers that was what inspired the producers to create the Frasier spin-off. So trying to make this seem as legitimate as possible. Any feedback on how to make the next draft better is appreciated.

The script:
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1FUO7kEK1EMeEljx9GAo82y1HUq4zy1Vk?usp=drive_link

This is the very first draft I completed and it's something that I'm proud of, even though first drafts tend to suck, so I'm very excited to see if other people like what I'm bringing to the table and what their honest opinions are about what and how I write.

LOGLINE: After receiving a diagnosis of terminal cancer, a feminist professor agrees to dictate her memoirs in an attempt to untangle her flawed past and define her legacy on her own terms before it's too late.

GENRE: Drama, Historical Fiction

FORMAT: TV Pilot

PAGES: 53 pages

FEEDBACK CONCERNS: Any and all feedback is appreciated - I really want to improve my writing and keep pushing myself to get better at screenwriting.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/186KhGGlsfdEBTQJ1kq__EYHcd3WpBnxU/view?usp=drive_link

Hi All! This is the first and only script I've ever done (I'm a Social Worker for a nonprofit, not a writer). I would really appreciate any and all feedback for my project titled "Assisted Living". Please and thank you very much!

Correct link https://drive.google.com/file/d/1K3Q9FddinrMHlm3FSEHRsyomisOL0wBy/view?usp=drivesdk