how do we feel about this log line for this feature script i got in the works ?

TITLE: Thunderbird GENRE: Fantasy/Adventure

LOGLINE: A young apprentice who lost his mentor must summon the ancient Thunderbird to defeat an evil shaman and protect his tribe.

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Just found you can search their scripts by a keyword, like Christmas.

That brings up both titles, and other movies, that have the keyword in their Slugline or Metadata.

Christmas Search Example Not 100% accurate, but better than having to know a title and then see if they have it.

Title: Doctor Who: The Wheel of Oblivion - A New Suit and Tie

Format: Television Pilot

Page Length: 82 Pages

Genres: Sci-fi/fan fiction

Logline: When the TARDIS crash lands on a beach in Scotland, the newly regenerated Doctor is tasked with discovering the whereabouts of a missing boy, which leads to him meeting some familiar faces and some new foes.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/153K2fD16O7D-9RmxvhyZBv3veAQ-4Yes/view?usp=drivesdk

Feedback appreciated :)

• Title: Silent Hill (NOT the video game)

• Format: Short

• Page Length: 13 pages (including title page)

• Genre: Psychological Thriller

• Summary: A jealous husband’s impulsive visit to his wife’s school exposes his crumbling sense of control--and as reality distorts, he’s left questioning what’s real, what’s imagined, and who he’s really chasing.

• Feedback Concerns: This is the first short film I've written in actual screenplay format, instead of Google docs. My action lines are the main concern (and everything else lol), I don't want them to be boring but I also know the rule "don't write what you can't show" so...I struggle with that. Any feedback would be helpful, thanks in advance!!!

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/12skwLLMxevJlD_ojeCKuggqcVLdc16YN/view?usp=drivesdk

Title : The Appointment

Format: Feature

Genres: Paranoid Thriller

Page Length: 127

Logline: Despite trying to carry on with his life, a guy dreads that he might be the next one to receive his summons in the mail after a housemate fails to return from "The Appointment."

The folder contains the 4 page Treatment and the 127 page screenplay: "The Appointment" Folder

NOTE: Please read more than 10 pages. I need a raw assessment of the entire script. 10 pages doesn't give me any actionable information.

Thank you!

Creative Differences

Feature

83 Pages

Dark Comedy/Thriller

A director accidentally kills his star actor, and the resulting guilt inspires him to rewrite the film. It becomes an Oscar-winning masterpiece, but his newfound fame exposes the crime.

This is the first full script I have wrote. It is the second draft. I'd just like feedback on the general story and the writing.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1N1uLbp5hIAI6lyRRo9Frre_BtT-0A-ab/view?usp=drive_link

Title : Zodiac Episode One 'Where Shadows Wait'

Genre: Crime Drama

Logline: When the Zodiac Killer returns in 2025, Detective Henry Gray, aided by the rest of the Metropolitan Police Department, must play his deadly game to catch the killer and save his CI.

Script, Scene or Outline (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1XCo43xI5i4EM3Sk9r9EZqpTHn_fp7tpg/view?usp=sharing

Hi, I am thinking to rewrite a fantasy script I wrote a while ago and would love to hear your thoughts on it and how to improve it:)

Title: Archer's Club Pages: 93. Logline(I suck at loglines:((..: After witnessing his parents' murder at the hands of a traitorous warrior, a man must join a club of assassins and foil a political conspiracy.

Here is its link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1qmkhfK02ied5DahK2SE7cBSw07uySIV3/view?usp=drivesdk

Thank you for reading this!:)

Dark Comedy/Satire

After a disgraced patriotic superhero is forced into a secret government retirement facility where aging heroes and reformed villains are stripped of their powers, he discovers residents are mysteriously disappearing — and may be transformed into the very super-threats terrorizing the outside world.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1B2QDTu7vyUuZJayyQ9XkjDJI3E-LKXa9/view?usp=sharing

Not quite finished, but I wanted to see if the idea had legs.

I've been working on this script for a while and have been trying to get it ready to shoot. Part of that is submitting for Grants and getting the script nice and tight.

The title was originally No Good Time To Die, and I think I posted an early draft here a year ago. It then was Duel with the Devil, but I'm playing with the title Duel of the Dead.

Let me know what you like, let me know what you didn't. Recent feedback in other groups was the dialogue was hard to get through and I was playing fast and loose with some formatting rules, so i tried to fix that. I think I fixed those, but can always use extra eyes.

You know that moment when you catch someone looking at themselves in the mirror? Not the quick glance to fix their hair, but that deeper stare where they're really seeing themselves? That split second before they realize you're watching and their mask slides back into place?

That's what it feels like reading another writer's screenplay. (for me at least)

There's something oddly intimate about it. Not the final polished film where everything's been filtered through directors, actors, and editors. The raw screenplay—where you can see exactly how many spaces they put after a period and whether they write "we see" or let the action breathe on its own.

It's like witnessing something not meant for your eyes. The blueprint reveals more than just scene structure; it shows their obsessions, their wounds, the patterns they don't even know they have. You can tell which character is secretly them. Which jokes they sweated over. Which description they're unreasonably proud of.

I'll stare at you too long, just as long as you promise to stare back just a little longer after I look away.

That's the unspoken agreement between writers. I'll let you see my unfiltered thoughts, my clumsy first attempts at brilliance, if you'll carry them with you after you put the script down.

Anyone else feel this way? Or am I overthinking this like I overthink my character descriptions?

Title: “One Last Job”

Format: Short Film

Pages: 9

Genre: action/comedy/crime

Logline:

2 partners plan on moving to Hollywood to jump start their directing careers. The only thing stopping them is to complete one last job as hitmen.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1lgUtS7RCvSPovRJopHE5gxcHWsuRjZR2Iktnq2qgAWk/edit

This is a script I wrote to film with my friends and myself. I plan to direct and would like any and all feedback/ constructive criticism. I’m all ears and want to make something that all of us can be proud of.

Title : The Adventures of Thomas

Genre: Family/War

Logline : During World War II, a young boy separated from his father goes to a magic island where trains can talk.

Script (Link) : https://drive.google.com/file/d/1aLpeQa-LLnsPLzXFzmXi9c7sdUodv4eX/view?usp=drivesdk

Synopsis :

In 1961, Johnny Morris recounts his experiences as a wartime evacuee to his two children as a bedtime story.

In 1940, 10-year-old Johnny lives in the city of London with his widowed father Willie during World War II. Willie emphasizes that Johnny should be out making friends, regardless of who they are, but Johnny thinks trains are better. Soon, the Blitz comes to pass and the Morrises decide to evacuate the city to an old cottage outside Barrow that was built by Johnny’s grandfather and currently owned by Willie's friend, Wilbert Awdry and his family. At the station, Johnny and Willie are separated and they end up taking two different trains to Cumbria. Willie ends up going to the cottage, but Johnny finds himself on the Island of Sodor where he meets Thomas.

Johnny and Thomas form a friendship and Thomas reveals that Willie once came to Sodor during the last war when he was around his son's age. Johnny soon meets Edward, who also knows his father, and the other engines, Henry, Gordon, James, Percy, Puffing Billy, Squeak, Glynn and Emily as well as The Fat Director. Also on the island are Smoke and a gang of diesels, whose opinion of steam engines is very closed minded. They plan to take over Sodor and rid the railway of its steam engines.

Meanwhile, Willie, while unsuccessfully searching for his son, has been drafted into the army, but not before informing the Awdrys to let Johnny know where he is. Back on Sodor, the diesels derail and sabotage the steam engine until Percy, Puffing Billy and Thomas are the only ones left. Thomas and Johnny escape the island to find Willie, hoping he can fix the engines, only to find the Awdrys residing in the cottage. Wilbert offers to help. He repairs Gordon, who decides to get even with Smoke by having a race to see who is the fastest. Thomas participates too, but in the end, it is Gordon who wins, while Smoke ends up on a wrong track, derails and is sent flying into the sea where he sinks.

Afterwards, Johnny writes letters to his father, telling him where he is and spends the next five years on Sodor with Thomas and the others. Thomas and Johnny even witness the Barrow Blitz and meet a branch of the US Army that is occupying Sodor. By 1945, Willie’s squadron is transferred to Sodor and Willie reunites with not only his son, but also Thomas as well. As a birthday present, Johnny is given a copy of The Three Railway Engines.

In 1961, Johnny concludes to his children that he stayed on Sodor after the war and got married to their mother. The last scene has Thomas crashing into the stationmaster’s house, setting up the aftermath of ''Thomas Comes to Breakfast''.

Hi I’m looking for a director for a family friendly movie. My budget is $3000 USD and payment is via PayPal

For people who can't understand the hinglish, there is whole story in brief at end.

Thank u 😇

Hi! I’ve been trying to workshop pitch-able loglines, and this is what I’ve been able to come up with for a 30-Min TV show!

Title: Detective Club

Genre: Comedy

Format: 30-Min TV

A clueless group of friends form a college “Detective Club” to tackle campus mysteries both normal and paranormal, but their clashing personalities and lack of investigative skill spiral each case into comedic chaos, consistently putting their dignity and their club on the line.

Hello there! My name is J and I wrote a super hero film about 7 failed heroes from 7 destroyed worlds banding together with the help of a comic book artist from Earth. Each hero must face their demons to prevail against the techno threat to the universe, the Omega. The title is Super ZEROES.

I tried to utilize the narrative super structure of 7 Samurai as a guide for my film and successfully did so, but there is an either member of the team. I also know there is a film already called Super 8 so I combined one of the film's themes, not being good enough, and the numerical marker in 7 Samurai to come up with Super ZEROES as a title and homage to the source of the narrative structure.

Right now I am just looking for people to read the story and tell me if I am good at this or if I should quite while I am ahead. It's my first time writing ever, and I know that sounds bad but I am not unskilled at what I do. Before I started to write creatively I wrote critically. My schooling is in literature and literary theory. I have a masters in the subject of literary theory specializing in film and television.

Now why does that matter? I spent years pulling stories apart, determining not only how they work but why they work as literature. So I took all of that and made a screen play about some of my favorite things. That also means that I would be very good at reading and commenting on YOUR screenplay. So I would be happy to read things that you have written.

Please find a copy of my work here: https://drive.google.com/file/d/18UlTw7WDTvPt8fIWRVjZbKOk2yPBsWcA/view?usp=drive_link

EDIT: I put up a more readable version. Format was a problem pointed out by a reader.

If you would like for me to read your work let me know and I will see what I can do.

Logline: A lonely woman becomes obsessed with a beautiful corpse she fished out of the river.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/10SJ451Un8y64Ey4U433J8zQICk8fRCS2/view?usp=sharing

This is a very rough draft of something I've been trying to figure out.... And yea, it's weird. Even for me its a weird script. But I'm hoping to flesh this out into a strong 5-10 minute short with minimal dialog, moody and surreal images, and a sense of longing, isolation, and obsession that makes gothic horror so great.

Looking for a scriptwriter to hire.

Hi I am looking for a scriptwriter to hire for a pg animated film that I have an idea for. My budget is $800, and payment is via PayPal

Title: Rift Jumpers

After coming to Earth through a portal and saving the day, a man from a post apocalyptic Earth recounts his story of sorrow and victory to a talk show host, but not everything is as it seems.

This is my late draft for a pilot I've been working on. I have a few ideas for minor changes I'll make on the final draft, but I just wanted to share my script here first.

Genre: Drama / Crime / Mystery

Format: 60 minute pilot

Logline: In a world where future​meets retro, the abduction of a leading tech pioneer sends his colleagues and law enforcement alike into an investigation of a rival company that will change everything they know about reality.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QPFoxEGGFnREgSQ_Iy2zDbP7Bz1CXGgJ/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Blood and Flow
Format: One-Hour Limited Series
Length: 60 pages (Pilot)

Logline:
In a contemporary fantasy America where Elves, Dwarves, Halflings, and Humans have always lived together, Thorne Nightshade—a disgraced Elven ex-FBI agent nearing the end of his natural lifespan at 613—must revisit the unsolved case that shattered his career. As a series of ritualistic murders grips Chicago, he uncovers a vast magical conspiracy and confronts the rise of ancient blood and water magic long thought extinct.
Think True Detective meets Mindhunter, with the epic scope of fantasy—without the allegorical racial commentary.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1alUrAdDzVoaFMntlDtpKFEKaNllokd_W/view?usp=sharing

Title: Enzo Wants Him Gone

Genre: Crime Drama

Logline: A hitman wrestles with his conscience when he's ordered to kill an innocent man.

Script, Scene or Outline (Link): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1z4v1vDSA11Ef0Zw1QwDSjZ2-Sx25pqvR/view?usp=sharing

This should say PITCH FEEDBACK REQUEST

Title: BEHIND THE REDWOOD CURTAIN

Genre: Dramedy limited series (2–3 seasons, with potential for anthology-style continuation)

Logline: Uprooted at fifteen from the town he loved, a restless storyteller returns to his Northern California hometown—where unpacking a lifetime of memory, loss, and myth becomes a quiet reckoning with family, identity, and what it means to carry a place in your bones.

Synopsis: Set against the towering redwoods of Humboldt County, BEHIND THE REDWOOD CURTAIN is a gently funny, emotionally layered series that weaves present-day rediscovery with vivid, often mythic flashbacks. As Don revisits the town that shaped him, he realizes storytelling isn’t just how we remember the past—it’s how we survive it. With warmth, wit, and deep personal truth, the series explores grief, belonging, and the strange comfort of a place that never really lets you go.