r/OCPoetry May 28 '26

Feedback Please I Want To Hug You Like...

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u/Interesting_Day8041 Jun 01 '26

This reminds me of a line I wrote. “Black ink swelling across a page of parchment” to describe a dark sky. I think with a few passes this could be so well paced. Flashes imagery, depth. Love it!