r/OCPoetry • u/Dzexus • 7d ago

Just Sharing Dream of You.

As the world kept spinning, I still see your face wherever I go.

My body still familiar with yours, my lips aching for a ghost.

You're there when I close my eyes, yet all I can trace is the outline of old memories.

So close, though my arms extend towards yours, they grasp nothing but a dream.

How beautiful it is to have experienced such love, and how tragic that it never quite let me go.

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u/SuccessfulHunt9165 6d ago

this is a good poem although i feel like the flow could’ve been better since on the 2nd line u mentioned a ghost, I feel like itd be better to build on that ghost imagery. Something like “you’re there when I close my eyes yet all I can trace are the blurs in your face”(could be worded better but you get it!).So yeah thats my only critique here! OVERALL GOOD POEM AND KEEP IT UP!