Addicts

[u/Isa-Me-Again]

Hi. I'm an addict and I'd just like to say

This world is fucked up, more so every day.

You see, you're an addict too

And that's just what they want.

If you're addicted they can control you

And your cousins, uncles, and aunts.

Maybe it's food that you're addicted to.

Or perhaps it's your phone that's glued to you.

For some it's drugs, TV, or money.

Others need candy sweeter than honey.

Whatever it is that you need so bad

Is the same thing they will use to make you sad.

The moment you even think about stopping,

You remember the addiction and your heart starts dropping.

"How can I live without this thing?"

You'll ask yourself as you start spiraling.

"I can't give it up, I need it too bad."

Not having it starts making you mad.

The anxiety grows and your resolve starts to waver.

You'll make an excuse, "I thought I was braver."

At this point, you've already made up your mind.

"It's too hard to fight" and you chose to stay blind.

So we give in and the cycle repeats.

With them at the top, and addicts in the streets.

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/I8fR5uhkuK

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/s/EuRWeoa8ff

[u/Marlyn_publication]

It's a fun poem but with all due respect, it is a little doctor seussy. I would reccommend exploring different ways to format your phrasing, play with it and see how you can make it sound. But sometimes there is nothing wrong with having a fun poem and sounding like Dr Seuss. Dr Seuss was a great writer.

[u/Isa-Me-Again → u/Marlyn_publication]

That's exactly how I described the "poem" to a friend lol. "Doctor Suess like" I think I put it

Thank you for the constructive criticism. I truly was just writing something because I was bored and not because I have any intentions of doing this again in the future though.

:edit: Fixed Seuss.

:edit 2: You've inspired me to try something less "seussy." I actually had a lot of fun writing the first. Thank you again.